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Posted by: Don, April 5th, 2010, 5:43pm
Untitled by Robbie - Short, Drama - {no logline} 8 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: bert, April 5th, 2010, 6:57pm; Reply: 1
Hah -- this may well be the single worst ending I have ever seen for a script -- anywhere.

Is this author around?
Posted by: Scription, April 5th, 2010, 7:06pm; Reply: 2
...Wow.


Uhm, well...what can I say? Interesting concept. I liked it.


But yeah, the ending I didn't get. At all.
Posted by: dogglebe (Guest), April 5th, 2010, 8:20pm; Reply: 3
This was bad from the get-go.  There was no character development and the story went nowhere.

What is the point to the ending, Robbie?  You have to explain this.


Phil
Posted by: jwent6688, April 5th, 2010, 8:27pm; Reply: 4
I wrote it. Sorry. The pills were actually Advil. Just had to take em cuz I knew that overdramatic bitch was gonna take me back.

I dunno what to say to the writer. At least put a name on your script and if you're new people would see that and help you. And bash you. (just me) - but I'd still offer something. Try to at least.

Lotta formatting issues, but won't hit them cuz i don't know who i'm talking to. If you wanna learn, post here and respond. People will help you. I'm too busy writing the first academy award winning movie where people get their tongues pulled out.
Posted by: Colkurtz8, April 8th, 2010, 2:48am; Reply: 5
Not that badly written in regards to the prose, could do with some work but I found it an easy read. The dialogue was a bit cheesy at times and the story itself didn't amount to much, lacked any real developed thus I couldn't fully engage with it.

The ending made me laugh a lot though. Whatever about the sheer laziness of it I can safely say I've never read anything like it before.
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