Camp Crystal Lake Trilogy Part 1: Camp Crystal by Jesse Camacho - Horror - Before he picked up the machete… Before he he wore the mask… Before he drowned… He was just a boy… 97 pages - pdf, format 8)

Camp Crystal Lake Trilogy Part 2: Camp Blood by Jesse Camacho - Horror - After he drowned, she wanted revenge!! A re-imagining of the 1980 original Friday the 13th! 92 pages - pdf, format 8)

Camp Crystal Lake Trilogy Part 3: His Name was Jason by Jesse Camacho - Horror - He's been waiting his whole life. Living in the woods, the time has come to become the man we always knew he would be.... 94 pages - pdf, format 8)

Read the first ten pages of part one. Your dialogue is pretty on the nose. That's not a good thing.

An interesting take for a fan, watching Jason grow up At Camp Crystal.

I would suggest you start making some friends here. You just posted 283 pages of work. You'll be lucky to get a serious read.

Also, i don't get why the text truns red at times, You need to fix that. Good luck...

James

Quoted from jwent6688 Also, i don't get why the text truns red at times

It's...blood. No, it's revisions me thinks. You're right though, it needs to go. A "real" title page wouldn't hurt either.

I just finished reading all three, I'm in no position to critique or praise so all I can say is I would pay the $8 to see them on screen. thnx for the read

Quoted from JBrow I just finished reading all three, I'm in no position to critique or praise so all I can say is I would pay the $8 to see them on screen. thnx for the read

I'm not sure I agree. However, as a high court judge might say... and then Ian "Monkey Magic Man" Brown steps in to utter "For each a road"...

Dot dot dot. Must stop that. Ahum, point is if he'd pay eight dollars then there's someting right here. If he actually feels that way. As the bottom arse line is the money in the till, honey. We're trying here to get in da biz. And that bottom line is the money, bunny.

Arse!

R x

Quoted from JBrow I would pay the $8 to see them on screen

$8 each or as a tripple-header?

Is Jesse around to read these reviews, and thank the reviewers?  After all, people are reading trilogies.


Phil