I am the Falcoln by Yankee Dasani - Short - Frankie Ann, an awkward young teen, finds herself stuck in small town America while dreaming her life away. - pdf, format 8)

Hi, just read your short.

The meaning should be very subtle as I didn't understand it at all. But I'm not good at subtle:) ...

You format some of the action lines as you'd do series of shots, with
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--I wouldn't do that. It's distracting, I think. Why not to stick to the regular form.

I noticed strange capitalizations. At one place Gabby was not capitalized too.