A Wonderful Little Murder by Daniel J. Murphy - Short, Comedy - The silly tale of an arrogant professor whose demise on Sheffield College's campus brings about the murder of students. - doc, format 8)

Daniel...

Nothing wrong with using wordpad but you need to know the ingrediants of a properly formatted screenplay.  Lots of free screenwriting software on the web, suggest you get some.  Celtix comes to mind.

You need spacing in your slugs.

I'd great rid of all the "Italics".  

"END OF LOCATION."  What is that?

You mentioned shooting draft.  Are you filming this?

Open up a few scripts then compare them to ours.  Big difference.

Lots of telling but know showing.  Big chunks of paragraphs.  I'd really consider limiting them to four lines.

I'd suggest reading some screenwriting books as well.

Good Luck

Ghostwriter

Hi Daniel.

This is like deja vu for me. I used to write like you until I joined this site.

Please listen to the sound advice people like Ghost and others give you. I did and still do and while not being the sharpest knife in the box I've improved a helluva lot and recently had two scripts optioned.

Many people including myself have a lot to thank the guys on this site for. I really hope in the months to come you'll be singing the same song.

Best of luck!

Chelsea (formerly Emcee)

Very hard to take what you have written seriously. My guess is that you read some shooting scripts and formulated an idea that this is how spec or reading scripts are written. It's not. Even if this script is going into production, do yourself a favour and remove THIRD DRAFT stamped across each page. It looks pretentious at best and makes it very difficult to read.

Your title page is formatted incorrectly. This is true of your entire script. I strongly suggest you read some scripts and check out how they are laid out and formatted. There might be a story here, but everyones attention will be focused on your format and you are most likely going to get hammered on it.

Just read some scripts. Like they said. You'll get the hand of it.