The Arc Light Island by Patrick McFadden Jr. - Thriller, Political - The bloodthirsty and tyrannical leader of North Korea has banished 35 scientists to a remote island so they may secretly construct for him a bomb. Nearing completion of the bomb a large earthquake occurs causing a tsunami to wash away everyone and everything on the island. The Arc Light Island sits dormant for the next nineteen years until one day it suddenly regains a pulse. 183 pages - pdf, format 8)

Too the writer...

Don't recognize your name, so I'll just give you a few suggestions.

1), Keep your scripts to between 100 and 120 pages.  You're sitting at 183 pages and it's way too much.  You can eliminate some of that by putting this into the proper format beause it is not.  

2),  When you first intoduce your characters, please CAP them.

3), This reads like a novel, more then anything.  Big blocks of text.  Try to keep it under five lines.  Scripts are written in (Real Time) as well.

I also noticed you have another script uploaded as well.  Same goes for that one as well.  Best advice is to read more scripts and learn proper script formatting. There are dozens of guidebooks that will help you.

For the good, you've registered your script with the Writer's Guild of America.

Good Luck

Ghostwriter

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In a word - format

Patrick submitted this and another script last June.  He hasn't shown his face once, to thank those who read them.  I suggest we let this thread die.

Why read an orphaned script?


Phil

This was the unproduced script for the day, that's the reason i checked it out.

This thread is currently resting at the bottom of a freshily filled grave, nuff said.