A Long Walk by Christopher Lunt - Short - Bert goes for a walk in the woods, he finds a body with a case full of money.  All he has to do is find his way out again… 8 pages - pdf, format 8)

Not much to comment on here Christopher. Its a story I've heard many times before. Man finds fortune... It becomes his death. And the cycle repeats itself. For some unknown reason.

This was long for 8 pages. Try to not go over three lines in your action sentences. Break them up. White helps, I guess. Lots of typos and off formatting.

James

You don't need to capitalize Bert every time.

"He gets into the car and drives off through a town and into the countryside" This felt too rushed. You need to describe this more. Or just cut from him pulling off, then to the countryside.

You are missing the word "of" in a lot of your action. Like you say "Bert gets out the car" It's out OF the car. I use to do that ALL the time (and still slip up and do it now) so I've trained myself to watch out for that.

You need to learn how to tighten up your actions.

No one talks to themselves in that much detail. unless they're crazy. It would only be like a few words or something.

You should really read more professional screenplays. That would help your writing out a lot. You TELL us things that you could show us instead. And your actions are too wordy. I was skimming through half of it because I already understood that he was just... walking around.

There was no real story either. A man finds a briefcase full of cash, and he tries to find his way out of the woods. But he can't find his way out of the woods. As wooden as that "logline" sounded, that summed up your entire script.

Read, read, read. That's the best advice someone could give you at this point. I was the same way when I first started.