Coming Home by Jeff Thompson - Drama - You Can Never Go Home. 109 pages - pdf, format 8)

Hello Jeff,

I just want to kick this up because your title caught my attention and so I decided to do a mini-dip into your work.

I have to say that you have an extraordinary eye for visuals as witnessed by your first long paragraph. Although it might be highly unusual for a screenplay, the way it was done, I really think that you captured what was going on on screen extremely well.

In the future, break up such a long paragraph and tighten and shorten it to the point where you have to kill a lot of it.

Seriously, you have that knack for visuals though and I will try and spend some time on some of your script.

Sandra

hey thanks for the comments Sandra, will work on that.

Jeff