Love in Subtitles by Zack Van Eyck - Short, Comedy - A comical day in the life of a suburban couple is explored using subtitles, for every line of dialogue, to show what the characters are really thinking.  Male and female leads in their 30s, a 13-year-old girl, 10-year-old boy, a male and female neighbor (20s-40s), a few extras and a dog.  Comedy, 17 pages.  - pdf, format 8)

Zack's a shorts machine, he keeps chiming them out! pity he's not around to comment. I would have read this otherwise because it sounds different and original...Oh well.

Steve

Steve, go right ahead if you like!   I just optioned this one to a production company down here last week.  They have it for six months.  I'm going to do a rewrite for them that removes the strip club (they don't want to try to create that set or find a strip club to shoot in) and to make it a little more economical to shoot.  Don't think I'll be doing the rewrite for a few months as they are shooting another one of my scripts first.  So, I'd appreciate any feedback you might have.

Thank you!

Z

Hey Zack...

It's me...the one who emailed you. I like your work btw. Glad to see ya made it on the site.

Dena