I Am by Charlie Borchard - Short, Romance, Sci Fi, Fantasy - Two scientists attempt to give a prototype android human emotions.  21 pages - pdf, format 8)

Seems okay - but there's some issues here & there - visually, I don't get the crate - one minute it loomed over the guys, then they look inside - then it appears to to be the height of a woman - just a bit all over the place.

Script had a bit of an intruiging 'feel' to it.

... Manuel - should be manual.

I'm not a bit fan of the Jump Cut:'s that keep appearing.

DAISY’S POINT-OF-VIEW: is written as if it were a transition ... ?

     RUSSELL
That would be because your deep (you're)



... Victor snaps his fingers, a moment later Russell
-- the sentence structure here is wrong - use of commas and full stops - it happens a couple of times.

Interesting idea - thought - I'll wait to see if you're around the boards for the time being.