Hello. I am new here, just joined the other day. I have completed my first script, but I admit, I had no clue if I was doing it right or not. I have edited the script on my own, but now I am really looking for opinions on whether it is any good or not. I am also looking to have someone read it and tell me what mistakes I have made.

Looking forward to learning more about script writing and hopefully I can finally get a good, Hollywood ready script completed.

If this is your 1st script, as you say, chances are you didn't even come close to getting it right...  I'll let one of the regular members greet you n' all of that -- But I'd be willing to look at a few pages of your script and see where you're at.

Quoted from Baltis. If this is your 1st script, as you say, chances are you didn't even come close to getting it right...  I'll let one of the regular members greet you n' all of that -- But I'd be willing to look at a few pages of your script and see where you're at.

I'm sure I didn't get it right. :) I've been scoping script review services but they tend to be so expensive.

Like Balt

I'll take a look as well. If you dont feel comfortible posting it, you can email it to me.

Shawn.....><

May I ask what format is better for you?

PDF...

dxer...

You've come to the right place! ;) We are all willing to help around here. Look forward to reading your work.

dena

Welcome to SS.

This is the place to learn though you only get out of it what you put in. Read others work and post comments for them and many will return the favor.

We where all in your shoes once, and have moved forward due to the help from many kind and helpful people on SS.

Enjoy

Regards Alex

Welcome to SS.

Be sure to stick around for a wee while to receive some of the best feedback up for grabs IMO.

Like others, I'm willing to take a look at your work as well. It can be a tricky business to learn, but, once you get the hang of it, you should be all sweet (Sorry about the kiwi slang :P)

I'm Daniel, btw.

Hello dxer

welcome to SS. It's nice for once to have some ask for help before they post!!

If in doubt read a handful of scripts, check out the threads on writing format and keep working on your project, but don't forget to start others. I think a selection of scripts when you start out is a helpful way to learn.

Cheers

Bill

I'll second Bill's comments here and say it's nice to have a newbie is honest enough to say their first script probably needs work rather than the ones who claim to have written the greatest script since....since....(was going to include one of mine lol)

Welcome to the boards, dxer07002.

Quoted from Pale Yellow dxer... You've come to the right place! ;) We are all willing to help around here. Look forward to reading your work. dena

Thanks for the welcome Dena. I checked the site out before joining. Looks like the perfect place to get the help I am looking for. :)

Quoted from Alex_212 Welcome to SS. This is the place to learn though you only get out of it what you put in. Read others work and post comments for them and many will return the favor. We where all in your shoes once, and have moved forward due to the help from many kind and helpful people on SS. Enjoy Regards Alex

Thanks Alex. I am going to read the scipts posted to the site. I'm still trying to learn hwo everything works here. I'll get the hang of it in a few days I'm sure. I know I am not too good at criitiquing work though. Especially when I am a noob trying to learn myself.

Quoted from danbotha Welcome to SS. Be sure to stick around for a wee while to receive some of the best feedback up for grabs IMO. Like others, I'm willing to take a look at your work as well. It can be a tricky business to learn, but, once you get the hang of it, you should be all sweet (Sorry about the kiwi slang :P) I'm Daniel, btw.

Nice to meet you Daniel. I'll try to get my script to everyone once I get it into PDF format. I used Movie Magic Screenwriter as my writing program. I'm still fixing a few things, but once I'm done, I'll post it or email it to everyone who is willing to take a look at it.

Quoted from Reef Dreamer Hello dxer welcome to SS. It's nice for once to have some ask for help before they post!! If in doubt read a handful of scripts, check out the threads on writing format and keep working on your project, but don't forget to start others. I think a selection of scripts when you start out is a helpful way to learn. Cheers Bill

Hi Bill.

I'm under no delusions that I am any kind of screen writer. I have always wanted to write one, and many times came up with ideas and outlines. But I never got around to completing one. This time, after having a story in my mind, I stuck with it and completed it. Like I said, I am under no impression that it is any good or that I did it right.

I'm really looking for feedback regarding, not the format since the software I used formats it, but mostly if I used the scene headings right, what is weak, what is strong, what I could change to make the scene more powerful, stuff like that.

Quoted from alffy I'll second Bill's comments here and say it's nice to have a newbie is honest enough to say their first script probably needs work rather than the ones who claim to have written the greatest script since....since....(was going to include one of mine lol) Welcome to the boards, dxer07002.

I'd probably say i wrote one of the worst scripts ever. LOL.

I watch movies all the time. I have seen a lot of crappy ones and thought to myself, who wrote this piece of junk and how the heck did any studio agree to make this? I thought that if those cruddy movies could get made, any movie could get made.

I am really looking forward to any advice I get from the people here.

Quoted Text I watch movies all the time. I have seen a lot of crappy ones and thought to myself, who wrote this piece of junk and how the heck did any studio agree to make this? I thought that if those cruddy movies could get made, any movie could get made.

That should be a slogan for inspiring writers. lol.

Welcome aboard dxer. Been getting a lot of activity I see. That's good. Review scripts. Doesn't matter if you're a noob or pro. It builds good re pore.

Gabe

Quoted from Mr.Ripley That should be a slogan for inspiring writers. lol. Welcome aboard dxer. Been getting a lot of activity I see. That's good. Review scripts. Doesn't matter if you're a noob or pro. It builds good re pore. Gabe

Thanks Gabe. Ask my friends. I say that all the time. it does give inspiration though. Basically, I used my feelings as my inspiration to finish mine. But again, I am under no illusions that my script would ever be sold or made into a Hollywood movie. if anything, i always felt that maybe I could make my own movie. :)

BTW, everyone, my name is Bobby. I use to pen names to write, but mostly those are for books. I have two books I have started writing, two chapters into each. And yes, i am using a different pen name for each. However, I am using my real name for this screenplay. I don't know why. I just figured I'd keep them all separate.

Hey dxer,

Good to meet you.  I'd also be happy to help you with your first script (I'm writing my first feature at the moment, as well).  The advice might not be as kick-ass as the other two who have offered but it might be useful to get some ideas from another developing screenwriter as well.

You can send it to me here, if you want: gage9598@gmail.com

Good to meet you and happy to have you aboard!
Gage

Quoted from Gage Hey dxer, Good to meet you.  I'd also be happy to help you with your first script (I'm writing my first feature at the moment, as well).  The advice might not be as kick-ass as the other two who have offered but it might be useful to get some ideas from another developing screenwriter as well. You can send it to me here, if you want: gage9598@gmail.com Good to meet you and happy to have you aboard! Gage

Hi Gage. Nice to meet you too. I'm just making a few editing changes, like spelling and grammar. Once done, I'll send it to anyone who is willing to read it. I understand there may be a back log of scripts being posted at the moment. If anyone wants to read it, I can email it over. You all can PM me your email address. Hopefully I can get it out within the next few days.

Welcome aboard, Bobby.

SS is a fantastic tool if used correctly. Your learn alot here by just browsing but remember to participate around the boards and get yourself known by leaving feedback on a few scripts. That way your get lots of feedback on your own script.

Cheers.

Steve

Welcome aboard, Bobby.  Movie Magic is the way to go, as far as I'm concerned.

Lots of good peeps here to help, but as others have said, it's a Quid Pro Quo world here and to get reads and feedback, you have to do the same.

Best to you, bro.

Quoted from CoopBazinga Welcome aboard, Bobby. SS is a fantastic tool if used correctly. Your learn alot here by just browsing but remember to participate around the boards and get yourself known by leaving feedback on a few scripts. That way your get lots of feedback on your own script. Cheers. Steve

Thanks for the welcome Steve.

Quoted from Dreamscale Welcome aboard, Bobby.  Movie Magic is the way to go, as far as I'm concerned. Lots of good peeps here to help, but as others have said, it's a Quid Pro Quo world here and to get reads and feedback, you have to do the same. Best to you, bro.

Thanks for the welcome. I really like Movie Magic. I downloaed a PDF file tutorial and learned the program in minutes.

One thing I'm trying to figure out and making sure I have it right. Member scripts are posted under UNPRODUCED SCRIPTS correct? and when we post feedback, we do that in the FEEDBACK thread correct?

Quoted from dxer07002 One thing I'm trying to figure out and making sure I have it right. Member scripts are posted under UNPRODUCED SCRIPTS correct? and when we post feedback, we do that in the FEEDBACK thread correct?

Navigating the site can be tricky at first.

Best advice I can give you is that little button up top on the right:  "Portal".

That gives you a big board with all the recent activity.  There are a number of ways to get around the board, but that is one of the best.

Happy hunting.

Quoted from bert Navigating the site can be tricky at first. Best advice I can give you is that little button up top on the right:  "Portal". That gives you a big board with all the recent activity.  There are a number of ways to get around the board, but that is one of the best. Happy hunting.

Thanks Bert. I'll check it out. I'm picking things up as I go along. :)

Hello Bobby- I'm Dirk by the way. Glad to see another newbie on this site that looks for help first before posting their script. I joined recently myself and currently writing my first script. Like Dreamscale posted to you earlier, you read their scripts and they'll return the favor. Even if your reviews are lame like mine tend to be, it still shows that you took the time out to read their script. Good luck with the script and buzz me when you're ready to post it.

Quoted from DV44 Hello Bobby- I'm Dirk by the way. Glad to see another newbie on this site that looks for help first before posting their script. I joined recently myself and currently writing my first script. Like Dreamscale posted to you earlier, you read their scripts and they'll return the favor. Even if your reviews are lame like mine tend to be, it still shows that you took the time out to read their script. Good luck with the script and buzz me when you're ready to post it.

Nice to meet you Dirk. My fear is my reviews would be lame. But, I'll give it a shot, once I have some time this weekend.

I finished editing as much as I can right now. I'm converting to PDF file. So, if you all are still serious about reading it, I'll send it out to you all. Just let me know where to send it.

Hey Bobby- Don't worry about how you review scripts. It's hard for someone who's just started writing to give any advice to someone who's been writing for years. A simple "I liked it a lot" goes a long way. Leave the long drawn out reviews to the guys who know what they're doing. And just "pm" me when you're ready and I'll check it out. Take care.

Quoted from DV44 Hey Bobby- Don't worry about how you review scripts. It's hard for someone who's just started writing to give any advice to someone who's been writing for years. A simple "I liked it a lot" goes a long way. Leave the long drawn out reviews to the guys who know what they're doing. And just "pm" me when you're ready and I'll check it out. Take care.

And even when you do get something wrong in a review, people will most probably point you in the right direction. We're very helpful (some cases abusive) with things like that :)

OK, I'm comfortable now with people reading the finished script. Any of you who said you are interested in reading it, please give me your email address so I can send a PDF file to you. Thank you all in advance.

Hey Bobby- I "PM" you. It may be faster for you to PM people to get them to read it quicker for you. Just in case that you don't know, up top of this page to the left is the Private Messages box.

Not sure if you mentioned this, but mind letting us know what the genre and logline is?

Gabe

A log line? Haven't given one a thought. I view the script as a drama. It is about a guy who loses everything, has a poor relationship with his demanding father, and meets a female who helps him out of his depression and get's him to build up his lost faith and confidence. I know, a story already told 1000 times. But what story hasn't been?