Doberman by Lawrence Gilliam (speedygilliam) - Short, Action, Adventure - Ronald has trained Dobermans since he can remember for Special Ops and the DEA, he now needs them to perform one more mission for himself. 40 pages - pdf, format 8)

I'll bite.

I made it through about 7 pages, and I gotta say it was tough to read.

First and foremost you've got punctuation errors throughout. On almost every single line of dialogue and nearly every description. I would consider bribing somebody to edit that end of the script for you, because parts of it are just plain difficult to read.

Also, you've got unfilmable details in there, like telling us that both Ronald and Mike are ex-special forces in your initial descriptions of them. As an audience, we can't see that. You've got to show it to us.

You've got the basics here, but there's a lot of work yet to be done.