Goodbye, Preston by Mark Hopper (imarko) - Drama, Historical - It's the height of the AIDS epidemic and medicines to keep it in check have yet to be invented when Richard Hamilton tests positive for the HIV virus. Problem is, he doesn't want to leave his abusive lover and face death young and all alone.  - pdf, format 8)

Does the formatting look all right to everyone else? I'm just getting a page with the script mixed up in a bunch of HTML or something. You should submit this in pdf, Mark.

Right now it's kinda hard to review this in the shape it's in, but I can tell from the paragraphs I read that your writing needs some work. Too many camera directions. No sluglines in sight. Big paragraphs.

Sorry, man. I would go into more detail if the formatting was readable.

Will

Yeah this thing is a mess.  Syntax everywhere.

Agree with Will on the one readable paragraph.  A lot of camera direction and unfilmable words.  Cut out both and just stick to what we can see and hear.

Hopefully you can get this reposted soon.  Good luck.

Johnny