Dislocate by Timmy Osoba (timstapix) - Drama, Romance - Two African guys came to LA to find love, but for one of the guys, love doesn't last at all. 123 pages - pdf, format 8)

Well, I made it through five pages. The mistakes were countless. Misspellings in the opening paragragh. Words missing. I'm wondering if English is a second lauguage for you.

There wasn't much that grabbed my attention. You have to get where you're going in a hurry. There has to be something to grab a reader's attention. Errors and a slow start aren't the way to do it.

Sorry if it sounds harsh but I can't read any further. Best of luck.