Lost Pond by Nathan Ryan - Short, Drama - When your public persona is at odds with the private; A story of growing up and feeling different.  - html, format 8)

Hi Nathan,
I read the first few pages. Its not formatted correctly.
No need for the scene numbers and every scene should have a proper slug (i.e. EXT. FOREST - NIGHT)
Don't put your action lines in brackets.
You don't properly introduce your characters.
I wouldn't bother using camera angles/shots like CUTAWAY TO unless its a shooting script.
To be honest, its not very well written. A lot of the action lines don't sound right and the dialogue could be better.
'He stares for a while before Sam shouts for him to keep up' - a line like this could be written better ya know what I mean.
Just read more scripts and take notes as you read them to get a better idea. Also get your hands on Celtx or other free screenwriting software, it makes it so much easier :)

Hope this helps. Keep writing and good luck
-Gavin