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Posted by: Don, September 10th, 2013, 4:36am
Outta Time by John Whetstone - Short - An inspirational road trip to "Back to the Future" filming locations causes a failed L.A. screenwriter to reconsider his decision to give up on his dream. 19 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, September 11th, 2013, 9:08am; Reply: 1
Hi John,

I enjoyed this a lot. Maybe there’s some script formatting errors of some kind I don’t know, I just got lost in the story and the characters and I was immersed.

I loved reliving Back to the Future via the tour you took me on and I identified with the hopes and dreams of the fresh blood arriving in LA and the frustration and depression of Jason.

There was a couple of points when I thought something Supernatural was going to happen and they’d find themselves in the movie.  Then there was a point when I thought you would do a flashback and show Jason arriving and going through a very similar experience with a group of guys arriving in LA and taking this tour with someone who was leaving, a kind of a Back to the Future Part 2 parallel.

You didn’t do any of these but it shows you how much you got me thinking as I was reading and in the end I was very satisfied with how the story progressed and the lessons within it.

On the last page you say Universal Studies instead of Studios but maybe studies does fit given the context of the short :-)

Great job, it would be lovely to see this produced.

Mark
Posted by: AdamJohns, September 11th, 2013, 11:55am; Reply: 2
Thanks, Mark!  I appreciate your comments. I'd love to get a producer/director to shoot this. And thanks for pointing out the typo.

John
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