Rescue by Jimmy R - Short, War, Adventure - Four American soldier undertake a mission to rescue a group of civilians holding hostage by three other Al-Qaeda soldiers in an Iraqi village. 12 pages - pdf, format 8)

This needs a lot of work. There are multiple spelling mistakes (even in the logline!), calling your characters Persian because they're from Iraq is like calling people from Italy: Romans, and I don't understand why in some sentences you capitalise some words. For instance:

brain and blood
SPLATTER onto the wall...

Speaking of which, you mention splattering brains way too much in your action sequences, why not mix it up a little? Plus, guns being fired don't need a 'BANG BANG BANG BANG' to signify they're being shot every time.

If you want a heads up on how to handle action sequences, read my screenplay: 'Eraser Game' in the unproduced scripts. The formatting is awful I know, but the quality of the action segments is what you want to be aiming for if you're serious about writing a screenplay about war.  

Every script need a rework/rewrite before it becomes an official in a prodution to shoot into a film, no matter how perfect it is/was written. My script is simply an idea of a story. I'm talking about a full feature script-- this is just the opening scene of the feature length. You should read the whole 100+ pages because it contains the sound of gun-shots all over the place lolz.... Well, I'm not done with it yet-- still working on the ending. I just want to mention a scene or two about the chemical attack in syria in the story before ending it.

Btw, thanks for reading it, though. I'll look into the errors--