Kat LeShay: The Matrix Dossier by Rat W - Short, Action, Adventure - Kidnappers get more than they bargained for when they kidnap Kat LeShay’s estranged husband. (This is the result of an exercise to write a short story incorporating as many cliche elements as possible.) 5 pages - pdf, format 8)

Thanks, Don.  8)

Just something fun I did a short while back, now doing nothing but gathering dust on my hard drive.
Thought I'd share.

Anyone else got some film/story cliche pet peeves to grieve about?

Quoted Text Kat LeShay: The Matrix Dossier by Rat W

Hey! That's "Ray" not "Rat"!!! ;D

Freudian slip?

I will read. Once my pipe is empty. It's the slugs. The margarine didn't help either. But Frankie had a good time.

R

Tried to read on my iPad...didn't seem to like me in google docs.

I'll try tomorrow.

Dear Rat,

sorry - Ray,

Not sure about this Google docs business. I think it may have  something to do with friendly internet giants lying through their teeth. So more me than you, then. Moving on...

Wasps? Did you have to bring them up so soon? If you mention slugs then I'll know you're messing with my head.

Frankly I was a bit lost. It was like that time I had to pick up a parcel in Birmingham.

I take it this is to be animated so a certain tone is to be had, hence the dialogue being the way it is and the inheriant silliness. Something I'm obviously quite a fan of.

The line about 'a blade' is very good. It needs more of that stuff as it does feel like it's missing something as it is.

R

Quoted from rendevous I take it this is to be animated so a certain tone is to be had, hence the dialogue being the way it is and the inheriant silliness. Something I'm obviously quite a fan of.

Nah, I had no intention of animating this.
I got fed up a few months ago reading a bunch of nube written stories riddled with sophomoric cliches and though I'd grunt out one of my own with as many cliches crammed in there as I possibly could.
The tone was to be absurdly serious to the point the reader would ask aloud "Are you serious?"

No.
No I'm not serious.
I'm seriously annoyed with silly sophomoric cliche, but no, I don't think this is serious story craft.
It's shite on a surfboard.

Quoted Text The line about 'a blade' is very good. It needs more of that stuff as it does feel like it's missing something as it is.

LOL!
Sweet Jeezus!
You mean I missed opportunities to cram more cliches?!
Heavens.

;)

This was very funny. Due to a lot off added asides to the reader and some of the descriptions I do think that maybe some of the jokes could be hard to show on screen, though.

By the way, I was immensely relieved when I realized that it was satirical (right about the time Toki showed up). Up to the point I was thinking "seriously?" ;)

Thanks, Andy. :)

In the sequel I will introduce Toki's successor, a token almost-as-attractive hot Asian sidekick chick with a katana: Tokai!

(Barf.  I feel emabarassed even to layer on the drivel this thick.)