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Posted by: Don, June 15th, 2014, 3:12pm
Ode to Blue Valentine:  Ryan Gosling by Kyle Smead - Short, Drama - An actor's Script:  James, an isolated greaser, goes through steps of the the method to prepare for a love scene. 5 pages - pdf, format 8)
Posted by: Toby_E, June 15th, 2014, 3:25pm; Reply: 1
Hahaha, what the fuck did I just read?

:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
Posted by: irish eyes, June 15th, 2014, 3:45pm; Reply: 2
Sweet Jesus lol

Very poetic  ;D

Mark
Posted by: AnthonyCawood, June 15th, 2014, 5:40pm; Reply: 3
Well formatted!
Posted by: Guest, June 15th, 2014, 5:46pm; Reply: 4
LOL
Posted by: DV44, June 15th, 2014, 6:04pm; Reply: 5
That could be the greatest thing I ever read! Lol.  ;D
Posted by: SAC, June 15th, 2014, 7:53pm; Reply: 6
Did this guy Kyle hide a microphone in my shower, or what? Sheesh...
Posted by: Reel-truth, June 15th, 2014, 11:20pm; Reply: 7
That was f*ckin crazy..LOL....So stupid, but so ridiculously funny.
Posted by: nawazm11, June 16th, 2014, 12:45am; Reply: 8
This was amazing.
Posted by: rendevous, June 16th, 2014, 1:28am; Reply: 9
This was silly. Very.

And repetitious. And silly. And repetitious.

R
Posted by: bert, June 16th, 2014, 9:26am; Reply: 10
An actor's script?  What actor haha.

Repeating dialogue for effect is one thing, but the actions are also maddeningly repetitive.  They would likely appear comical if played out as written.

Despite all of that, there is something oddly compelling going on here.

I do hope Mr. Smead joins us.  He's got some 'splainin to do.
Posted by: Heretic, June 16th, 2014, 9:50am; Reply: 11
http://www.houdeschoolofacting.org/wp/about-us/the-meisner-method/

…unless I miss my guess, which I may well have.

For what this is, I'm kinda thinking that it's well-paced and would probably be fun to watch. There's something interesting about the idea of a scripted presentation of an improvisational form, though I wonder if this would play well or seem really rigid if you actually shot it.
Posted by: tailbest, June 16th, 2014, 10:37am; Reply: 12
Got to steal my thoughts from Toby.


Quoted from Toby_E
Hahaha, what the fuck did I just read?

:D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D


I guess the formatting is fine......

Rob

Posted by: DustinBowcot (Guest), June 16th, 2014, 1:11pm; Reply: 13
Well written... just not my cup o' tea.
Posted by: Bogey, June 16th, 2014, 3:12pm; Reply: 14
I might watch if cast with Lenny and Squiggy.
Posted by: KyleSmead, June 24th, 2014, 10:44pm; Reply: 15
The script covers layering through lines and sense recal in beats between the performance, and is intended to protect the private areas of both actors.  It comes off like a vagina monologue for a man, giving him the opportunity to separate his penis from his balls, and penis from balls to stomach.  An exercise I have been doing while studying drug topics for a method actor.  

With respect to the art of film, and, as a director’s script, it can really be interputed however the director chooses.  Reading with tears in order to hold them back.

All in all, I wrote it down while doing characterizations for a feature length script that I wrote in November about a man who works in the women’s underware department of a sporting good store when he falls in love with a woman diagnosed HIV Positive.

I wanted to expand on the relationship between the male lead and female lead, when I realized that I wasn’t putting enough stres on the importance of beats, and single written lines.  In the script it reads:

“Bob and Erica make love.”

When in fact the line is so late into the script that both characters, metaphorically, already made love, and has a much deeper context.

Again, I am thankful for your comments, and hope that this answers some of the questions.


Sorry for being late – etched down a couple shorts for grad school assignments.
Posted by: Colkurtz8, June 25th, 2014, 8:22am; Reply: 16
Kyle

“The room is empty.

JAMES, 20’s, jeans, belt buckle, white shirt, cigarettes rolled in the sleeve.”

- Perhaps I’m being pedantic here but this seems contradictory. In the first line you say the room is empty before going on to describe James’s presence in said room.

“Spicket” is spelt “spicate”

Possibly one of the oddest scripts I’ve read on here and dare I say pointless too.

Not much to add except it could have been shortened to 3 pages by tightening the prose with less breaking up the action lines…and warming up for a love scene is a rather curious process!

Col.
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