Blood of the Orders by M. H. Phyu - Series - Temple kitchen helper boy must find out who and what he really is and why the Orders hunting him. 24 pages - pdf, format 8)

Phyu,

You've created an elaborate world in the first 6 pages, but unfortunately your format and grammar are too poor for me to continue.

I recommend downloading Celtx, a free screenwriting program, to use for your future scripts, and read a lot more scripts to get a better understanding of how it's done.

There's no one way to write a script, but you're not going to get many reads with the script you've posted.

Jordan

Thanks for checking this out Nomad.  Yes..somehow a few and the most important pages were out of sync during the conversion to pdf and I did not notice before I submitted it.
I will try to improve grammar and format with Episode I.

M.H.Phyu