Hi Jesse,
I only read the first 10 pages so I can only go off that.
I agree with the comment made about the camera direction, it's not needed. Unless you are directing this movie.
There are a few mistakes in your descriptions, wrong tenses and things but nothing major.
I will say that when describing someone or something use specifics, for example - BLAKE, 40s, all american.
What is an all american? I'm sure there is not one generic looking all american, just like there isn't a typical looking Englishman, we need specifics.
All a person in there early 40s to someone in there late 40s, appearance wise may look totally different. I would suggest just typing early 40s or late 40s.
It's not terribly written at all, just needs looking over again.
It's very slow moving for a script of 69 pages, I would recommend making it more exciting at the beginning.
My final thought, your logline needs work. It reads awkwardly.
Hope this helps.
Lee O'Connor
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