The Twin Thieves by Eshan Kamarsu - Short, Action, Adventure - Khan and Akbar are childhood friends, currently thieves in Dallas, only known as the Twin Thieves. After getting caught on their last mission they loose everything in their possession. So to get a normal life, the Twin Thieves have to rob a businessman opening up a new store. 11 pages - pdf, format 8)

(We don't see Pranav kick
KHAN) (It is presumed)

take that out....

the story to me jumps all over the place. it has legs but... the dialogue is way to much, a little to much for my bit. to be honest i didn't understand the action. then you use a lot of parentheses. iono it just wasn't for me but

what re write number is this??