Kidnap Adventure by Rion Martell - Action, Adventure - Four wealthy siblings are forced to survive in the wild after escaping from their kidnappers. 103 pages - pdf, format 8)

Rion,

I took a quick look. The opening scene at the restaurant is 16 pages long. That is 16 minutes of a family around a table talking. You need to cut it down. I know your trying to establish character and relationships but it's too much; you're going to lose your readers. Not much else to say here. Best of luck.