Seekers by Justin Kelly - Short, Comedy - A mockumentary style comedy where a group of young adult friends from Melbourne are finding who they are and seeking where they belong in life and are as useless as each other. 33 pages - pdf, format 8)

Hey Justin,

I'm gonna be blunt here, not James Blunt coz I'm not him but blunt nonetheless. Your logline does not in anyway sound like a comedy nor does it make me want to read a single word of your script. If it was a few pages you may get more reads but at 36 pages, your  title and logline must get across what the story is about and entice people to read on; spike their interest otherwise they won't turn the page.

As it was I decided to give you the benefit of the doubt and fired it up, only to find there's plenty of errors at even a glance and it looks like you may have written this in word. So I'm going to assume you are fairly new at this and yeah, we've all been there.

Read scripts, lots of scripts that have been produced; loads are available on the Simply Scripts main website.  Read books, good highly recommended  screenwriting books. As a start I would recommend 'How Not to Write a Screenplay' by Denny Martin Flinn.

Also get hold of some script writing software as this will do most of the formatting for you. There's a free one called Celtx you can download and it's supposed to be pretty good.  

I hope that helps, all the best.

-Mark