Don't Remind Me by Barry Katz - Series, Sitcom, Pilot - A doctor's perfect life unravels when a down-and-out ladies' man arrives on his doorstep to cash in on an I.O.U. from grade school. 52 pages  - pdf, format

Listen to the original theme song

Listen  to a full audio production of the script with real actors.


Writer interested in feedback on this work

Producers / Directors who may be interested in the project:  I have talent attached to play the lead male roles.  You can see them in action in the following short film:

"The Show" - http://vimeo.com/69420774

Also, if you haven't already listened to the theme song for "Don't Remind Me," I highly recommend it.  It was written and produced by an exceptionally talented pair of composers in the U.K.  Link below:

"Don't Remind Me" (Theme Song) - https://www.musicxray.com/xrays/1265228

Thanks for posting the revision, Don!  The full audio production of the script was a few years in the making.  It's great to finally have it done! :)

For those who may have missed the link to the full audio production of the script:  https://soundcloud.com/barry-katz-248855171/dont-remind-me-sitcom-pilot

Barry,

Congratulations on finishing your screenplay.

I have just a few notes, suggestions and maybe a question or two for you.

Questions:
Did you use some sort of screenwriting software when you wrote this? If not, you may find it helpful to do so. There are a lot of great free ones out there; WriterDuet, Celtx, FadeIn, to name a few.
I asked this because a lot of your spacing seems off. Particularly in the dialogue.

Also, maybe I am unfamiliar with series writing, but is it customary to tell us which characters are going to be in the scene? This could be a shooting script and if so, that might make more sense.

Parenthetical:
Normally they fall between the characters name and the dialogue.
Example:
DAVID
(Loudly)
Tiff? Honey? The omelets are getting cold.

Underlying:
Maybe it's just me. But my eyes seemed to dart to the underlying in your screenplay too often. Whether is be, the sluglines or you trying to accentuate a word or action. So in a way I found it a bit distracting and a little hard on the eyes in regards to a fifty two page script. But again, that's just me.

All the best,
Marty

Hi Marty!

Yep... I'm familiar with screenplay formatting.  TV scripts are formatted differently to film scripts.  I've written a number of shorts and features --- this was my first TV script.  I recommend checking out the full audio version of the script.  Much better than reading it :)

I just uploaded the audio version to YouTube as well.  Enjoy!  https://youtu.be/P7yyYKzPWXk

Barry,

Thank you for the clarification.

I will definitely give it a listen.

Best of luck to you with your current and future projects.

All the best,
Marty