This Side of Town: Chronicles of Omar by Kwasi Fraser - Drama - A street tale about a gangster who finds out a hard truth about what made him who he is. 108 pages - pdf, format 8)

Your contact details should be on the bottom right corner. Not the left as that is the side the brass brads go. Your intro is telling the director how to direct, when writting a spec that should be avoided. Show don't tell. Keep your action and discription to what is essential only. Less is more. Avoid long speeches by your cast. Never put the log line on the title page. Avoid using transitions in a spec, one or two are okay, but keep it to that.

I will strongly suggest you, read a few books on screenwritting before going any further. Or take some classes in screenwritting. I can see where your trying to go with this script, but learn the basics before you start out. Some authors I would suggest would be Syd Field, David Trotter. Robert Mckee. Just to name a few. The screenwriters bible is a must for anyone starting out. Good luck with it.

Hi Patrick. Welcome to the SS forum and thanks for taking part.

It's great that you read and offer up suggestions and you are of course allowed to read whatever you want. In this particular case, I wouldn't expect an answer from the author though. This script was posted here in December last year and the author has yet to show up here. Most likely he won't. If you
re looking for scripts to read and get return reads on your own scripts, you probably want to seek out active members' scripts.  :)