Damages Done by Kiril Maksimoski - Short, Drama - Family man descents into madness over a course of one night.  18 pages - pdf, format 8)

Sorry to be blunt - but I take it that English is not your first language?

The writing here, because of various grammatical errors is very difficult to get into. Even your logline has this issue - I took that to be just a typo but then read the first page of the script and realised it was part of a wider problem.

If the "Small Face" is Daniel, then just introduce him as Daniel - this makes it look like there are two characters.

"...as he stands by the window wandering out"

? I don't know what this sentence means. You could mean "wondering" but even that wouldn't make a lot of sense in this sentence construction.

Again, no need for "The Man" - simply introduce the character by name.

"A muscle, but yet soft voice..."

Sorry, I could go on but it would be unfair. You would be better writing this in your native language (Macedonian?) and having it translated, which might help. As it is there are too many bumps in the road for me.

One other point: you indicate that it's based on a radio play. By you, I assume? If so, I don't know if it's necessary to mention - usually it's when you are adapting other people's work that it is worth mentioning, but that's more a personal observation than a hard and fast rule, I think.

I tried to give this a go but the quality of the English and relatively large page count, for a short, put me off.

This one doesn't pass muster.  Dialogue is first grade and description is barely second.  Read some good scripts and have another go.

Best
Richard