Pitch your story with one sentence. For many readers, this is your first chance to hook them. What's your logline?

~Zack~

The great force that is Ian Pitt teams with Dr. Smith to hunt down the remaining cannibals outside Baltimore, and put an end to the 1,000's of deaths caused by the hermit cannibal, Elijah.

Quoted from Dreamscale The great force that is Ian Pitt teams with Dr. Smith to hunt down the remaining cannibals outside Baltimore, and put an end to the 1,000's of deaths caused by the hermit cannibal, Elijah.

Pure gold.  ;D

~Zack~

Quoted from Zack Pure gold.  ;D ~Zack~

I may add something about Helen.

Kosher - Late night munchies for a young couple at a deli turns deadly when the kitchen runs outs of pastrami.

;)

Quoted from CameronD Kosher - Late night munchies for a young couple at a deli turns deadly when the kitchen runs outs of pastrami.

You've got my attention.

~Zack~

A Cut Above the Rest - A food critic uncovers the dark truth about a burger joint that has never gotten one bad review... or else.

Sound tasty? ;D

As a child, Fred accidentally imprisoned a creature, drawing its enmity.  Now, it's free and wants revenge by destroying every aspect of Fred's life.

Is it okay to put that in 2 sentences, or should I go for a seemingly near run-on sentence?

lmk

Dan

2 sentences is fine.

Going to try to write something this weekend, but it depends if a baby decides to come or not! :)

I suck at loglines, so I don't have that yet, but I have two stories in mind. One monster and one cannibal. Roach Motel and Eat Me.  ;D

Quoted from Grandma Bear Roach Motel and Eat Me.  ;D

Both sound very promising. Lol

And good luck with the new baby! ;D

The Feasting House - A young man inherits his grandfather's farmhouse, but the kindly townsfolk aren't quite what they seem.

In the Genes - Celebrity organ cloning is all the rage with the Hollywood elite but when the organs start to go missing it's down to the lab's under fire boss to root out the culprit.

Finally an idea!  

Quoted from AnthonyCawood In the Genes - Celebrity organ cloning is all the rage with the Hollywood elite but when the organs start to go missing it's down to the lab's under fire boss to root out the culprit. Finally an idea!

That sounds awesome!!!!!

This logline is not good.

Demon in the Sack - A frazzled man recounts the events of a terrifying date to his immature co-workers.

(scarrrrry!!!!)

I'm bad at loglines, does this even make sense?

American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, this business man tries his hand at cooking.

Quoted from Steven I'm bad at loglines, does this even make sense? American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, this business man tries his hand at cooking.

That isn't too bad.  I think I'd go on and explain what type of cooking.  Right now it reads like a comedy.
Good luck
Dan

Quoted from DanC That isn't too bad.  I think I'd go on and explain what type of cooking.  Right now it reads like a comedy. Good luck Dan

American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, this business man tries his hand at cooking an exotic cut of beef.

I dunno, doesn't matter. My submission is based on Patrick Bateman so nothing will ever come of this.

'Too much gluten can be hazardous to your health.'

Kinda lame but it makes sense when you read it.

American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, a business man tries his hand at cooking.

Change this to an a. Unless it's a known character, you generally steer clear of mentioning specific people in a logline. But I think this works well enough. We know he's a murder and businessman and he's going to start cooking. The only question though is why is he? Or what is the obstacle in his way?

Quoted from CameronD American Cannibal - After getting away with a series of murders, a business man tries his hand at cooking. Change this to an a. Unless it's a known character, you generally steer clear of mentioning specific people in a logline. But I think this works well enough. We know he's a murder and businessman and he's going to start cooking. The only question though is why is he? Or what is the obstacle in his way?

I've already said this is based on Patrick Bateman, so whatever. He tells his buddies from work about this new, exotic diet he's trying out and offers to cook them a meal that night. So, they come over and have dinner. I wanted it to be funny in the same way American Psycho was.