Prey For Us by Luke Mepham - Short, Horror - With the Earth wiping itself of evil, 6 people are waiting it out in the ground floor of apartments with an out of order lift. Why are they there? Who has brought them together? 15 pages - pdf, format

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Why didn't you write more about Scott's reaction to Kevin killing Naomi? Maybe you could expand on why he killed her. I think Kevin and Naomi left the building for a very minor reason. The other people inside should have done more to stop them, I think. Remember to always capitalise 'I'. There was some action outside the building, but how about having more action inside? Not a bad story, though.