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Posted by: Don, May 12th, 2017, 5:09pm
Alanah's Love by Bernard Antoine Mersier - Horror, Thriller - Still suffering from childhood trauma after being raped by her father, uncle and their friends, when Alanah grows up she wishes she can find true love, but her unquenchable thirst for the blood of men who only view women as sexual objects is making it hard for her to find love. 97 pages Synopsis; Production

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Posted by: eldave1, May 13th, 2017, 11:02am; Reply: 1
I would lose the Watermark - it really distracts from the read - maybe it's just me
Posted by: FrankH, May 13th, 2017, 8:31pm; Reply: 2
Hey Bernard,

I agree with Dave, get rid of the watermark, it does distract from reading.
Remove "final version" from page1, protect your script by either Writers Guild or Copyright.

I only read a couple of pages. Your play with words are good, but maybe too many details for a screenplay.

I'll read more if you show up.

Logline is somewhat intriguing.

Frank


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