Personal Incorrectness by John Rainone - Series, Comedy - {no logline} 38 pages - pdf, format

New writer interested in feedback on this work

I would suggest adding a logline, a brief sentence on what the script is about. Scripts without one usually don't get many reads.

I read the first couple of pages, and I'm very confused. I don't know what the point is here, the dialogue seems very unnatural, and the formatting is off. I would suggest reading more. I don't know if this type of formatting is something I don't know about, but it definitely doesn't follow the traditional screenplay format.

Best of Luck,
Luis.