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Posted by: Don, July 12th, 2017, 7:14pm
The Taured Effect (Pilot) by Joel Heath - Series, Action, Adventure, Sci Fi - When a CIA operative is arrested in modern day, Nazi-controlled London for having a faked passport where she receives the biggest shock of all…The United States doesn’t exist. 53 pages - pdf, format
Writer interested in feedback on this work
Posted by: eldave1, July 12th, 2017, 8:12pm; Reply: 1
Read a few pages - not bad at all - I like your style. One nit, I think you are handling SUPERS wrong, e.g., you have:
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EXT. DESERT - NIGHT
Super “Afghanistan - 0200 hours.”
A full moon hangs in the night sky, a snow-capped mountain sits on the horizon partially cloaked in darkness.
The SUPER should be in caps and needs to follow a brief description (i.e., it has to be Superimposed over something. So the above could be:
EXT. DESERT - NIGHT
A full moon hangs in the night sky, a snow-capped mountain sits on the horizon partially cloaked in darkness.