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Posted by: Don, July 30th, 2017, 10:36am
Shitty Translation by Guillaume Dubé - Short, Comedy - An honest backpacker in a Spanish country must face the language barrier when it comes to an embarrassing toilet problem. 2 pages
production:2 characters, one location: a little restaurant and its bathroom. - pdf, format
New writer interested in feedback on this work
Posted by: eldave1, July 30th, 2017, 10:44am; Reply: 1
Didn't get this one at all - sorry.
Quoted Text EXT. HISPANIC RESTAURANT- DAY
Shot of an hispanic restaurant while people enter. |
Hispanic should have a capital H and you do mot need to repeat Hispanic Restaurant in the action is it already is in your scene heading.
Posted by: Twenteen, July 30th, 2017, 4:44pm; Reply: 2
This is a routine from British comedian Jack Whitehall that has been flat out plagiarised beat for beat. Pretty much all I got to say on this one.
Posted by: eldave1, July 31st, 2017, 10:39am; Reply: 3
This is a routine from British comedian Jack Whitehall that has been flat out plagiarised beat for beat. Pretty much all I got to say on this one. |
Well - that wouldn't be right - thanks for the info
Posted by: Simon, August 27th, 2017, 4:49am; Reply: 4
There are various grammatical errors. The story isn't too original, and personally, I would have just left the toilet. It wasn't too badly written, it mainly needs more creativity.
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