All Hallow's Eve by Adam Johnson - Horror - After an evil sorcerer casts a spell at a Halloween dance that turns people into monsters, a lonely girl in a new town must defeat an army of 80's horror icons and save her school from destruction on ALL HALLOWS EVE. 114 pages - pdf, format

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I haven't read this yet, but I think I'll wait and see what others think of it before I do. Is this supposed to be taken seriously, or is it more of a comedy/parody like "Scary Movie"? Your plot makes it seem to be that way... Also I skimmed through the entire script and pretty much every character name and location that I scanned over either referenced (or ripped off) from other horror films... and with that being said, if you're being serious with this script, you'll need to get a lot of copyright issues with those films worked out. Just saying. Like I said, I'll wait and read this until I see what others think of it.

I'll say not parody, but definitely firmly in the horror/comedy genre.  Waxwork and Monster Squad are the main inspo.  Actually, a grown-up 80's version of The Monster Squad is a pretty apt description.

Hello. I haven't read this yet and aren't sure if I will; I just wanted to point out that your title has a typo. "Hallows" refers to a plural, therefore the apostrophe should come after the s, not before. Best of luck!

-Julio

Adam: Not my genre but I took a look at the first few - may have some things that you can apply throughout.

All of your scene headings are underlined, It's distracting - I would lose it.

Quoted Text EXT. SANTA MIRA HIGH SCHOOL - NIGHT An establishing shot of a large high school. Gorgeous and stately. All is quiet at this late hour, except the wind.

- You don't need the first sentence. It's already in the heading.
- tell us what gorgeous means. Something like "red brick and ivy...: or whatever.

Quoted Text The heavy door closes behind him as he exits, and with him the last remnants of sound fending off the encroaching silence of the vast, empty school.

Way overwritten IMO. I did find some descriptions crisp and efficient - others, like the above, became prose. Keep it simple - i.e., the heavy door CLANGS shut behind him.

Quoted Text INT. VICE PRINCIPAL’S OFFICE - NIGHT The office is small, overrun with shelves full of books and

You do this throughout. You don't need "the office" - it's in your heading. Start the sentence with Small, overrun....

I do think there is a lot of promise in your writing - the dialogue is solid. There are places where the descriptions are perfect.

Hope this helps - best of luck