Raindrops by Jo Kolar - Short, Drama - In the midst of a storm, an abducted woman must escape to get back to the woman she loves. 8 pages - pdf, format

New writer interested in feedback on this work

Jo - the writing is fine IMO.

I didn't quite get the point of the story though. Seemed like a horror ending for the sake of a horror ending. You did have me up to the last page though.

I thought the ending was underdeveloped, (what happened to the wife, etc.) but other than that, I liked what you've come up with.

Thanks for the feedback! I'm new to the short story format so I struggleld quite a bit with getting the essentials. I'm normally used to writing (not necessarily screenplays) much longer pieces and, in this case, I had a different ending in my mind but I thought the story wouldn't be a short story by the time I was done with it.  I was worried about the ending not being developed enough and it seems like that was the case.

If there's any advise you have on short story writing, it would be much appreciated. Thank you!