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Posted by: Steven, August 29th, 2017, 9:14am
I always have trouble coming up with these things, but here is a logline for a script I've outlined.

A single man learns he has a teenage son. He attempts to bond with him the only way he knows how - through baseball.

The summarized story is as follows:

Sean, a 30 something former college baseball player, lives in the city (Chicago or NY) and works a pointless, but pays the bills, office job. His best friend since being a teen, Jackie, who plays with Sean in a weekend type baseball league, sets him up with date after date but Sean fails each time. On his own, Sean meets someone, they get serious, move in together, then Sean runs into a woman he shared a one night stand with some 13 years ago. She has a little boy with her - Sean's son.

His son sees all sorts of baseball stuff in Sean's apartment and comments on it, revealing that he's taken his father's gift of the game and is quite good. The bonding increases while Sean's girlfriend doesn't want children, and is offended that Sean is spending more time with his son rather than her.

Obviously more happens, but that's the sum of it. This is going to be written in a hard PG-13 or even R fashion, but light hearted.
Posted by: eldave1, August 30th, 2017, 10:05am; Reply: 1
Just spit balling:

When a man unexpectedly discovers that he has a twelve-year old son, he must decide if establishing a relationship with the boy is worth abandoning a relationship with the woman he loves.

Still needs work - but that is kind of how I would frame it.
Posted by: Steven, August 30th, 2017, 10:13am; Reply: 2

Quoted from eldave1
Just spit balling:

When a man unexpectedly discovers that he has a twelve-year old son, he must decide if establishing a relationship with the boy is worth abandoning a relationship with the woman he loves.

Still needs work - but that is kind of how I would frame it.


I feel like the decision there is obvious.

I'm considering modifying this a bit, where there is no former fling, but rather a woman he meets ends up having a kid that she doesn't mention at the get go. He struggles with taking on that responsibility but his mind is made up when he realizes the kid appreciates baseball and is very talented.

That's a way more believable decision, and a relatable one.

The way it goes now is Sean (protag) has a group of friends, enough to form a team, who want to start something more serious - an amateur league. They'll be a montage of try outs, so some comedy will ensue there, think of Major League. Also the woman - Irene, will be introduced as a local journalist tasked with covering Sean and his newly formed league.

This is a baseball heavy script, along with the lingo, so it will alienate certain people but whatever.
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