Alicia: You are missing some of the basics right out of the shoot.
Don't put your title on the first page of the script. That's what the title page is for.
FADE IN:
Quoted Text EXT. WOODLAND-DUSK
The rain pours down mercilessly under the stormy, gray sky...
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No need for the opening "The's in your descriptions. Rain pours....
She spots an opening in a tree trunk.
Quoted Text LEILA
Cy, lets get inside.
Cy heads inside first, our protagonist following behind
crawling inside.
Inside the tree trunk... |
You need a new scene heading here. e.g.,
INT. HOLLOW OF TREE TRUNK - DUSK
or something like that.
Leila takes out a blanket from the sack, Cy snuggling
against her underneath the sheet as they listen to the
downpour outside.
Quoted Text CUT TO:
We hear the chirping of birds outside the tree trunk, a
fragment of sunlight caressing Leila’s face. Her eyes flicker ope |
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Get rid of all your CUT TOs - you are using them in place of scene headings and using them incorrectly. Time has passed. It is not a cut to. Should be something like:
INT. HOLLOW OF TREE TRUNK - DAWN
Quoted Text Beside her Cy sleeps like a log. She
crawls out the tree trunk, stirring Cy who follows behind.
CUT TO: |
No Cut to. Should be:
EXT. WOODLAND-DAWN
You have this problem throughout - using Cut To rather than scene heading. Got to clean that up.
All the best