Halifax,
Just a few opinions, observations and suggestions.
I would lose the following hyperlink,
MUSIC CUE:
SCHUBERT'S 'SERENADE'
HTTPS://WWW.YOUTUBE.COM/WATCH?V=ZPA0L2WB86E-Most people will read this one pdf so the hyperlink will work but what if someone prints this? Also, people may not even open the link in the first place.
The formatting seems off. Especially with regards to the sluglines, characters and the dialogue.
-Sluglines should not be maroon.
-Character names should not be colored blue.
-Dialogue should not be spaced like that.
If you are not using screenwriting software, Celtx, Fade In, and Writer Duet are all free.
Don't use CUT TO: unless it is completely necessary to. Looking at some of them, they are not. It would probably also reduce your page count by a few pages if this happens throughout your script.
Try not to use direction shots unless you plan on directing this yourself, then by all means go for it. If you are not planning on directing it, describe what you want us to see instead of telling us it's a close shot.
Best of luck to you with your current and future projects.
All the best,
Marty