Rimgaudas,
Just a few opinions, observations and suggestions for you.
I would lose to logline and synopsis. It is unnecessary in a screenplay.
Watch your sluglines.
Example:
EXT. ALIEN WORLD - MORNING.
-Would be just fine as,
EXT. ALIEN WORLD - MORNING
-I wouldn't use the following,
EXT. ALIEN WORLD - MORNING. DOG’S POV.
-I would use the DOG'S POV in the action line. The DOG'S POV is telling us our vision, what eyes we are looking through, not our location.
Don't reference things like this,
The sight is reminiscent of an impressionist
painting:
http://www.theartstory.org/images20/works/impressionism_2.jpg?1
-If someone prints out your screenplay, how can they open the hyperlink? You describe the painting. Nothing else is necessary unless it is a painting like the Mona Lisa that everyone would likely know.
Parenthetical use.
-You use them a lot to describe action. I would recommend trying to write some of them as action lines instead.
Example:
CLERK
(sits)
I already know from your project.
-Could easily be written as,
The clerk sits.
CLERK
I already know your project.
Best of luck with your current and future projects.
All the best,
Marty