HMS Bagworth by Gary Stocker - Short, Comedy - Short Comedy about a British Submarine fighting in the Baltic sea. 10 pages - pdf format

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Nice one! Very "British" humor; it's almost surprising no one is having a cup of tea in his last hours alive...
Just a couple of comments.
- Instead of V.O. (Voice Over), it should be O.S. (Off Screen).
- In the dialogues, maybe you should shorten the name of the characters so one would recognize them easier (QUINTON instead of CAPTAIN QUINTON, CHIEF instead of CHIEF ENGINEER, FALCONER instead of FIRST OFFICER FALCONER, etc.).
Good luck!