The Wangs by David Foster - Comedy - A Chinese man has raised two orphans, that decide to finally leave home. 82 pages - pdf, format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Hello David,
You should get the title and other script details off the script page and put them on the actual front page on the scirpt.

Some format issues.

The first 2 paragraphs:

A very old, long white haired, Chinese man is sitting in a rocking chair in his garden, puffing on a long stemmed pipe.. He wears a purple colored robe with a yellow hat..He begins to tell the story of "The Wangs" in the year of 1492...


Welcome to my garden..I am "Fung Chucky"..And this is the only true legend of "The Wangs" that you'll ever hear.. Its a big one..So enjoy..

Should be more  something more like this.

FUNG CHUCKY, a very old, long white haired, Chinese man, is puffing in a rocking chair in his garden, puffing on a long stemmed pipe. He wears a purple colored robe with a yellow hat.
                    
FUNG CHUCKY
Welcome to my Garden. I am Fung
Chucky. And this is the only true
Legend of The Wangs that you’ll ever
Hear. It’s a big one. So enjoy!

No point repeating information.
Hopefully the script is as intriguing as this storyteller opening.