7 Montgomery Drive by Fred Koszewnik - Short, Comedy - The police are called on to investigate the disturbing screams from a house in their district. 1 page - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

I was surprised you were able to get so much story in one page (I think it’s really two pages, your descriptions need to be broken down a bit.
It felt suitably eerie and really felt the presence of the paranormal.
Think it would be more suitable in the horror or thriller sections.
Good job.

Hey Fred,

I liked this one. Short, eerie and funny. However, I think that you should broke down the descriptions of the third scene a bit, as Matt said. Do it and you'll have a nice comedy horror short than can be filmed on the cheap.

If I'm not wrong, you used MS Word to write this one. In that case, take a look at a software called Celtx, or another called Trelby. They are free and, if you plan on writing more scripts, they'll make your life easier.

Good job.

David

I heard that Celtx have limied their desktop features.

I've got to check out Trelby.