Another reboot of a TV series I'm barely familiar with based on a beloved horror movie franchise I'm quite familiar with. Let's dig in, shall we?
Titles are usually ALL CAPS. Nice pseudonym pun.
Bold is usually forbidden. As for bold slugs, some people like 'em, some don't.
Quoted Text "ELM ST" reads the rusted green[-]and[-]white road sign. |
Most road signs are green-and-white anyway.
Funny, ANN MATHER (not MATHERS) is on the Board of Directors for MGM and Netflix. See where I'm going with this? ;)
I don't think you'll be able to get Dustin Diamond. He's probably too busy doing Celebrity Survivor with Bobcat Goldthwait, Carrot Top, Hal Sparks, Weird Al and Meat Loaf. :D
"distinctive black fedora." Here we go! :D
Quoted Text The gate slowly swings open... SCREEEECH. |
When I wake up in the morning
And the clock is out of order
I don't think I'll ever make it on time :D
Referring to Freddy Krueger by his last name? Okay.
Quoted Text Krueger, still shrouded in darkness, now stands on the branch of a gnarled oak tree. His razor-clawed hand comes up, pointing a single blade at...
A gravestone two rows up and one column to the left. Freddy Krueger’s green and red sweater is draped over it. |
I still think you should put FREDDY KRUEGER in ALL CAPS.
Heather? Nice callback to Heather Langenkamp. Only four? Damn.
THAT Rod Lane? Interesting.
I like the chemistry/banter between Ann and Rod.
Quoted Text ANN I’m walking. |
I'm walking. Yes, indeed. :D
Quoted Text ROD You’re gonna be late. |
Judging by a cinematic precedent, I have a feeling Rod's gonna be "late."
Quoted Text MR[.] PEDERSON (38) young face, the kind of teacher that girls crush on, stands facing the chalk board. |
I love that introduction.
"Writ" is a bit of an archaic term. Nowadays, in the age when people don't speak Latin anymore :D, he say "written."
11 lines of dialogue? Normally, this is too much, except in special cases like here.
When you say "physically unimpressive," you do mean like Tyler Perry or Steve Urkel?
Quoted Text MALCOLM What if the truth is bad? |
Throw a childish temper tantrum on Twitter and call it fake news. :D
KIKO's a Trumpanzee. Unless she's talking about Faux News. But her appearance seems to give it away.
Quoted Text Unproven collusion. Clinton lost cause of Comey. Or was it the Russians? |
Unproven?!! Shut up, bitch! There have been at least 23 indictments so far. How's that fake-news witch-hunt Nothing Burger™ working out for ya? :D
Quoted Text Fox News is a hundred times worse. |
Amen, brother! (And I'm not even religious! :D)
I've been saying ever since I found out the idiot won.
Ha Ha! Burger Person! Nice jab at our overly-PC culture.
I hope that Kiko bitch uses condoms. :D
Top of page 7. I'm gonna call it a night and resume in the afternoon. It's been a fun ride. :)
Wow. Big update on the new Halloween reboot. Anyway, in the words of Marc Summers, let's get sloppy! :)
The last thing I wanna see in a slasher movie is a cell phone! Ugh. LOL.
Charles Gray, the English politician (1696-1782)? LOL.
"The grounds keeper." Oh. And "groundskeeper" is one word.
Ann Gardner. Any relation to Heather?
Quoted Text She doesn’t live here anymore. |
I bet her name's Alice. :D
New Line executive after the 2010 reboot:
Quoted Text Find a new story. There’s gotta be something more important in this world to write about than Fred Krueger. |
Damn, Face Off is coming on. Supposedly the final season. See you in an hour or so.
Let's get back to it.
A "wife beater" is a white tank top.
I would put FIGURE in ALL CAPS.
Quoted Text BOO, motherfucker! |
Reminds me of when Busta Rhymes told Michael Myers, "Trick or treat, motherfucker!" *shudders*
"Wet teens licking." WTF?
Rod damn well should be scared of Freddy, if cinematic history is any indicator.
Quoted Text Rod gets up and walks to the fridge where he proceeds to grab a beer. |
Grab one for Lynda, too. Whoops, wrong slasher movie. :D
Quoted Text How is it that I never heard of it? |
Beats me. He killed you 34 years ago. But I guess that was a long time ago.
Quoted Text EXT. ELM STREET - NIGHT
Ann, in her white silk nightgown, walks Elm Street again, not sure where she’s going. |
Redundant. Might want to reword this.
Quoted Text 1428 Elm Street. Nancy Thompson’s old house. |
Here we go. :D
Quoted Text Any red[-]letter headlines yet? |
Quoted Text You[']r[e] my subconscious. I own you. |
Quoted Text Oh, I’ve seen it. I’m jealous. Who needs a psychopath with claws when you already kill each other by the dozens every day? |
Freddy Krueger is woke, which is pretty ironic for a dream killer.
Quoted Text Unless you believe I could kill after death. Tell me, Ann. Do you believe that? |
Well, considering there's nine films of you doing so, I'd say there's little doubt. :D
I would CAP any MYSTERIOUS/SHADOW FIGURES, just to be safe.
"Bullshit." Goodbye, network TV. Hellooooo, cable. :)
Quoted Text To be feared[,] he has to be known again. |
"Cover up" can also be one word or hyphenated. "Cover up" means to hide your nudity, or to "cover up, or you're gonna catch a cold."
Quoted Text Christ. You’re just so fucking "woke" aren’t you? |
Is this intentional irony?
"real live" = "real life"
Quoted Text Fear creeps into Ann’s eyes. This guy is crazy or worse. |
Reminds me of a former friend of the family who once told me these right-wing conspiracy theories about Hillary, Obama, and the Democrats. She was clearly batshit crazy.
Quoted Text If you don’t leave[,] I’ll be forced to call the co- |
Also, use an emdash (—) or two hyphens (--) instead of a single, endash hyphen (-) when interrupting dialogue.
Quoted Text He pulls so hard her feet leave the ground. Her slippers fly away as she kicks her legs. |
Reminds me of Nurse Jill's death in Halloween II.
See, I told you Rod was gonna be "late." :D
*SPOILERS*
"blood[-]soaked"
Quoted Text He lunges forward and furiously wipes at the message. |
Obstruction of justice. Luckily, Mueller's on the case. :D
What do you mean by "(just air)"?
Quoted Text A Bird’s Eye View of the town. Silent. Peaceful. |
Like Hitchcock? Nice. Although camera directions are normally forbidden.
Loved it! I could definitely see this being filmed for the big or small screen. I would definitely pick this up as a series or the next movie.