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Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 27th, 2018, 8:58pm
Summer Heat OWC

Welcome to the July 2018 OWC.  Your challenge, should you chose to partake, is to write a properly formatted script 6 pages max, not including the title page.

The scripts are due on Friday, August 3rd at 11:59PM EST and must be submitted to: SimplyScripts.com/owc.


Genre: Open

Theme: Summer Heat if you live in the northern hemisphere. Cold weather if you live in the southern hemisphere.

Challenge: No dialogue

Skill challenge: At least one scene need to be clearly suspenseful regardless of genre.

There will be a Review Page E-mailed to you for you to score the scripts you read.  Please only give scores to scripts that you have read. Please do not rate scripts in your review.


Timeline:  Scripts are due August 3rd at 11:59PM EST.

Scripts will be posted August 4th.

Votes are due Sunday August 11th.

Scores will be posted Sunday August 12th.

This isn't a contest - it’s a challenge.  There are no official prizes…but stranger things have happened.

You may submit more than one script, but be aware that we have some seriously good writers here. IMO, it’s better to write one GREAT script than two or three mediocre ones. However, if you can pull it off, you’re welcome to.

You may also have a writing partner. Anyone that feels that's not fair should try to co-write at some point. IMO, it actually makes it harder.

You can revise your script as many times as you wish up until August 3rd 11:59 EST. Do not put your real name on your script – this is an anonymous challenge.  However, please use your real name when submitting your script.  After the challenge closes you can either have your script removed or resubmit your script with your name on it.

Participants are strongly encouraged to read and comment/review the other scripts submitted.

Please put © on your title page.

Best of luck and I hope everyone enjoys this challenge.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 27th, 2018, 9:00pm; Reply: 1
As some of you might already know, my very first OWC here at SS was in February 2006. It wasn't an official one since the January one had already come and gone. It was just put on by the members here. It was a no dialogue OWC and my first script posted here. I remember Mr. Z and Shelton took part as well, but there were others that I don't remember right now. I loved it and was bitten hard by the OWC bug. It also taught me to write visually early on. I've always wanted to do another no dialogue OWC since then. Don knew this, so here we are. Very timely too, I think, with the success of A Quiet Place.

The weather. Many places in Europe especially have seen their hottest driest summer on record. Places like Sweden, where I'm from, have forrest fires raging as we speak and farmers have to slaughter their animals due to lack of feed for them. Deadly wildfires in Greece and California, and so on and so on. I thought it would be appropriate to include weather in this OWC.

The hints:

Shhh...  = no dialogue

Cold in Oz  = weather in July

It will not be anime  = duh...

Bomb under the table  = suspense

Danny DeVito + Michael J. Fox  = both are known to be short

Math equation  = answer is 6, which is maximum pages allowed
Posted by: Pale Yellow, July 27th, 2018, 9:03pm; Reply: 2
LOVE this ... I'm in :)
Posted by: LC, July 27th, 2018, 9:09pm; Reply: 3
Pia, do we have to write according to our hemisphere? I think you should allow either given that it won't take long to guess writers residing in the South i.e., not many of us.
Posted by: LC, July 27th, 2018, 9:12pm; Reply: 4
Do not rate scripts in your review Got that score-lovers?

P.S. Pia, those scripts you mentioned of 2006 are not listed on the boards? I wanted to check some of them out.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 27th, 2018, 9:21pm; Reply: 5
Libby, the OWC in Feb -06 was an unofficial one. Also, back then they were a lot more low key. I'm not surprised they are no longer saved.

I would say, write in your hemisphere. You won't be the only one writing about freezing your arse off.  :)  Besides, no one would rate you lower because you wrote it. We love you.  ;)
Posted by: LC, July 27th, 2018, 9:24pm; Reply: 6
Well, we'll see if I'm the only one. Maybe Warren, Stevie... ?

Thanks for the love though. Right back at ya.  ;)
Posted by: SAC, July 27th, 2018, 9:27pm; Reply: 7

Quoted from LC
Well, we'll see if I'm the only one. Maybe Warren, Stevie... ?

Thanks for the love though. Right back at ya.  ;)


James is from down under too, I think.
Posted by: ReneC, July 27th, 2018, 9:43pm; Reply: 8
Wow. No dialogue, 6 pages. The challenge is on!
Posted by: LC, July 27th, 2018, 9:45pm; Reply: 9
Actually, we're on top of the world, just inverted.  :D

I think CamC? dips in and out of both hemispheres. He could write hot or cold.
And I'm holidaying north towards the end of Summer so technically I could have it both ways too.

Just trying to throw you all off course.
Haha, now you'll never know.
That's if I'm even in.

Love the choice of no dialogue, and max six pages,  btw.
Posted by: stevie, July 27th, 2018, 10:11pm; Reply: 10
It’s the middle of winter here right now. It’s 26 C today lol.
Posted by: LC, July 27th, 2018, 10:18pm; Reply: 11

Quoted from stevie
It’s the middle of winter here right now. It’s 26 C today lol.


Exactly. Averaging 23/24 lately with cold mornings. Unless we travel down to the Snowies we're spoilt. You in, Stevie?
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 27th, 2018, 10:19pm; Reply: 12

Quoted from stevie
It’s the middle of winter here right now. It’s 26 C today lol.


But the challenge says write cold weather if you're south of the equator.   :P
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), July 27th, 2018, 10:25pm; Reply: 13

Quoted from LC
Pia, do we have to write according to our hemisphere? I think you should allow either given that it won't take long to guess writers residing in the South i.e., not many of us.


Nice one Pia! I just left Melbs for the North Libby so you could be on your lonesome...
Posted by: stevie, July 27th, 2018, 10:42pm; Reply: 14
Yeah I have an idea. More to do with the drought. It’s really bad in some parts of Oz with farmer suicide.  Really bad. Yet our shit govt continues to send taxpayer money overseas

My son is going to Canberra tomorrow on a school trip. Later this week he will see snow for the first time and experience some temps below zero lol
Posted by: Talldave, July 27th, 2018, 10:44pm; Reply: 15
Summertiiiiiime and this OWC won’t be easy.
Posted by: stevie, July 27th, 2018, 10:56pm; Reply: 16
Budget requirements Pia?
Posted by: CameronD, July 28th, 2018, 12:11am; Reply: 17
In like Flynn. :D
Posted by: LC, July 28th, 2018, 1:36am; Reply: 18

Quoted from Cameron
... I just left Melbs for the North Libby so you could be on your lonesome...

:'( Lonely...
Cam G. - correction, sorry. Can't blame you for leaving Melbourne in Winter, but is it much better than Summer in Glasgow, or are you lot having a heatwave there too?
Posted by: IamGlenn, July 28th, 2018, 1:47am; Reply: 19
Sounds good. I think I'm in.
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), July 28th, 2018, 2:56am; Reply: 20

Quoted from LC

:'( Lonely...
Cam G. - correction, sorry. Can't blame you for leaving Melbourne in Winter, but is it much better than Summer in Glasgow, or are you lot having a heatwave there too?


Hahaha, I'm not joking when I say it's been that hot that I've been wandering around in shorts and sandals (or thongs, for the real aussies) for the last week or so!! It's a bit odd, even got sun burned the other day, but that's happened playing football in Melbourne during winter too so I guess I'm not a good barometer...
Posted by: khamanna, July 28th, 2018, 3:01am; Reply: 21
Go figure my hemisphere. I guess it's the same as yours, Libby. Funny, when I think of it - writing hot weather is much easier for me than cold. Not even writing but thinking hot is more natural than cold. Yeah, I'm from the east)
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), July 28th, 2018, 3:12am; Reply: 22

Quoted from khamanna
Go figure my hemisphere. I guess it's the same as yours, Libby. Funny, when I think of it - writing hot weather is much easier for me than cold. Not even writing but thinking hot is more natural than cold. Yeah, I'm from the east)


You're Baku ain't you, Kham? If so you're most definitely Northern hemisphere and uber hot hot heat, turned up to eleventy stupid!!
Posted by: khamanna, July 28th, 2018, 3:18am; Reply: 23
Thanks, Cam, now I know.
Pia wants us to think too much lately.
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, July 28th, 2018, 3:33am; Reply: 24
would that make writers on the equator, hemisphere confused, or sphere challenged :-)

or perhaps they are... bi-hempisheree ( i copyright that phrase)

i may often be confused, but not about my hemisphere. Thats one small bonus i suppose
Posted by: LC, July 28th, 2018, 4:58am; Reply: 25
We could just ask them what the weather's like...

"It is mistakenly believed that the weather on the equator stays the same. While tropical areas along the equator can experience wet and dry seasons, other regions may well be wet for much of the year. While temperatures at the equator are very high, there is one single point on the equator where you'll find snow."

https://eden.uktv.co.uk/nature/earth/article/equator-facts/

See, now they'd get a choice.  ;D

P.S. Not complaining btw. All cool.
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, July 28th, 2018, 7:43am; Reply: 26
I'm not so good with such open requirements and a suspenseful script with  no dialogue is so open I'm currently drawing complete blanks  but I'll have a think.
Posted by: realxwriter, July 28th, 2018, 12:01pm; Reply: 27
Those heads-up emails are so awesome! Thanks, Don. I'm going to win this one. Six pages, no dialogue? You are on my turf boys!

I'm turning into Gargamel. -_- Always with the threats at the end of every episode.
Posted by: ReneC, July 28th, 2018, 12:04pm; Reply: 28
I have some ideas but need a ruling first.

To me, no dialogue would still allow text on the screen to communicate, like a text message or writing on paper. I'd say sign language goes too far, but it is technically not dialogue. What's your stance on that, Pia?

As much as this challenge immediately makes me think of A Quiet Place, I don't expect to see a bunch of that for this OWC. We're far too creative and talented.  ;)
Posted by: PraneelNand, July 28th, 2018, 2:09pm; Reply: 29
Might actually have time to enter this one, like the premise and I definitely have a few ideas, might be a little outside the box, but I can’t wait for the scorn 😂👍🏾
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 28th, 2018, 2:13pm; Reply: 30

Quoted from ReneC

To me, no dialogue would still allow text on the screen to communicate, like a text message or writing on paper. I'd say sign language goes too far, but it is technically not dialogue. What's your stance on that, Pia?

There should be no formatting for dialogue. That's a given. However, we do a lot of communication these days via emails and texts and such. If you need to use some way to show a message I would use it very sparingly. The more you use, the more people will think you're pushing it or even cheating, so I imagine that will be reflected in the scores. I have no problem with someone receiving a text or an email, just not whole conversations.
Posted by: ReneC, July 28th, 2018, 2:44pm; Reply: 31

Quoted from Grandma Bear

There should be no formatting for dialogue. That's a given. However, we do a lot of communication these days via emails and texts and such. If you need to use some way to show a message I would use it very sparingly. The more you use, the more people will think you're pushing it or even cheating, so I imagine that will be reflected in the scores. I have no problem with someone receiving a text or an email, just not whole conversations.


Cool, that's what I expected.
Posted by: Zack, July 28th, 2018, 2:47pm; Reply: 32
I'm probably gonna have to bow out of this. Had an unexpected family crisis the other day and am in the middle of moving. Feel like my whole life just got flipped upside down.

Bummer, too. Cause this sounds like a fun challenge. I'll try to read as many as I can.

Zack
Posted by: khamanna, July 28th, 2018, 2:56pm; Reply: 33
Zack, hope all will return back to normal.


Me too, though. I'm in the middle of moving as well. Plus tomorrow I'll have to leave for another city for a couple of days which leaves no time for this OWC. Too bad, as a no dialog challenge sounds interesting.
Posted by: jayrex, July 28th, 2018, 5:23pm; Reply: 34
I don’t think I’ll be entering this one.  I’ve done this before and realised I’m just not good at non-dialogue competitions.
Posted by: FrankM, July 28th, 2018, 5:28pm; Reply: 35

Quoted from jayrex
I don’t think I’ll be entering this one.  I’ve done this before and realised I’m just not good at non-dialogue competitions.


When asked to explain, jayrex gestured wildly for several minutes. He stormed out of the room when it became clear that no one understood what he meant.



I'm banging my head against a wall trying to come up with a decent idea for this one. Might not happen  :(
Posted by: ReneC, July 28th, 2018, 6:28pm; Reply: 36

Quoted from jayrex
I don't think I'll be entering this one.  I've done this before and realised I'm just not good at non-dialogue competitions.


It's not a competition, it's a challenge. Everyone who pulls it off will already have won.

I'm already comfortable with writing without dialogue. The first half of The Trunk has no dialogue. But I wasn't trying to write a complete story without dialogue, so for me, it's still going to be challenging, and I do love a challenge.

This is a great skill to master, and I appreciate the parameters pushing writers in ways that will ultimately benefit them. Writing visually without relying on the crutch of dialogue can't help but strengthen our writing. Everyone should give it a try at least.
Posted by: Pale Yellow, July 28th, 2018, 6:52pm; Reply: 37
Ok I hate to act crazy but someone confirm.. if I live  in Florida am I writing about heat or freezing cold??
Posted by: ReneC, July 28th, 2018, 6:56pm; Reply: 38

Quoted from Pale Yellow
Ok I hate to act crazy but someone confirm.. if I live  in Florida am I writing about heat or freezing cold??


Heat.
Posted by: ChrisBodily, July 28th, 2018, 7:03pm; Reply: 39
I have a rough idea and a title. I've never written a script without dialogue before, so this will be interesting. Six page ought to be easy. Now, if I can only come up with a clever pen name.

@Zack Life's been crazy for me, too; pretty much the same story. My grandmother (who raised me) died a month ago tomorrow (along with the chihuahuas within the next two weeks). I didn't have the best relationship with her, but we both tried. Anyway, I wish you the best.
Posted by: Pale Yellow, July 28th, 2018, 7:16pm; Reply: 40

Quoted from ReneC


Heat.


Thank you so much!! Good luck to you! I love anything that pushes me as a writer... and this will be a good exercise!!
Posted by: LC, July 28th, 2018, 7:54pm; Reply: 41

Quoted from Pale Yellow
... if I live  in Florida am I writing about heat or freezing cold??


Hmm, I wonder if someone had one too many cocktails on a hot Summer night?  ;D
Posted by: Pale Yellow, July 28th, 2018, 10:07pm; Reply: 42

Quoted from LC


Hmm, I wonder if someone had one too many cocktails on a hot Summer night?  ;D


No way! I wish I could claim having cocktails but I'm not real smart about geography ...wasn't good at vocabulary either.. heck I dunno how I made it thru school even! :)

Honestly didn't know what hemiwhatever I lived in!!!!

SEE I'VE ALREADY LEARNED SOMETHING BEFORE TYPING THE FIRST PAGE!!!!
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, July 29th, 2018, 4:32am; Reply: 43
My wife knows me so well. She threw ideas at me all yesterday and one really clicked with me so I'm going to go with that, see how I get on today.

Reading through the comments I do think sign language with subtitles would be classed as dialogue and I'd certainly score down for that. However, if you had people signing without subtitles, that would work for me and be an interesting challenge. Kind of put the audience in the position of watching people sign and trying to work out what they are saying with their actions.
Posted by: ChrisBodily, July 29th, 2018, 5:10am; Reply: 44
Just finished my first draft. I think I have enough of a story to work with. Let's see what my revisions will bring.
Posted by: eldave1, July 29th, 2018, 10:34am; Reply: 45
Not to be a stickler - okay - it's to be a stickler. Shouldn't this OWC really be:

Summer Heat/Winter Cold ???

Posted by: JEStaats, July 29th, 2018, 11:48am; Reply: 46
Or "Summer heat, some are not?"
Posted by: ReneC, July 29th, 2018, 11:50am; Reply: 47
I almost never start writing within a day of the reveal, but this time an idea came unusually quickly and I started yesterday. The challenge for me will be the 6 page limit, but that was inevitable.
Posted by: ReneC, July 29th, 2018, 11:50am; Reply: 48

Quoted from JEStaats
Or "Summer heat, some are not?"


That's punny!
Posted by: CameronD, July 29th, 2018, 12:16pm; Reply: 49
How do we link to videos on here?
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, July 29th, 2018, 1:11pm; Reply: 50
Finished the first draft. Gonna sleep on it and revisit over the week to give it polishes and smooth caresses.
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, July 29th, 2018, 2:43pm; Reply: 51
i'm just trying to remember how to open the writing software and format the damn thing

gosh i have forgotten, well, everything it seems

i am already imagining all the comments re format , protocal etc

still not sold on my idea - some turds just can't be polished :-)

time will tell

but you never know
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), July 29th, 2018, 4:25pm; Reply: 52
I'm back!!!

Not at all thrilled with the no dialogue aspect here, but we'll see.
Posted by: JEStaats, July 29th, 2018, 5:04pm; Reply: 53
First draft done. I've two endings though. I'll have to pass it around to my editors (my wife and my sister. No, not one in the same!) and have them pick.

I'm very happy with it, so that means I'm doomed.
Posted by: ReneC, July 29th, 2018, 5:21pm; Reply: 54

Quoted from Dreamscale
I'm back!!!

Not at all thrilled with the no dialogue aspect here, but we'll see.


Good! Plenty of time for you to come up with something.
Posted by: ReneC, July 29th, 2018, 5:23pm; Reply: 55
My first draft is done. I'm in shock, that's never happened before.

I think the no dialogue restriction allows for faster writing. It's the dialogue I spend most of my time trying to get right. But it helped to have a good idea early.

I'll let this sit for a couple of days and take another look at it. Maybe I'll even write another.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 29th, 2018, 5:54pm; Reply: 56

Quoted from eldave1
Not to be a stickler - okay - it's to be a stickler. Shouldn't this OWC really be:

Summer Heat/Winter Cold ???


Originally, it was only going to be summer heat and then Cornetto posted on FB about how cold it was in Melbourne and that they had a Christmas in July thing going on, so...


Quoted from CameronD
How do we link to videos on here?

Look for a share button then click on embed.


Quoted from Dreamscale
I'm back!!!

Not at all thrilled with the no dialogue aspect here, but we'll see.

It's good practice to think visually.  ;)
Posted by: stevie, July 29th, 2018, 6:23pm; Reply: 57
Pia is there a budget thing in this? I asked earlier but you didn’t see it lol
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 29th, 2018, 6:27pm; Reply: 58

Quoted from stevie
Pia is there a budget thing in this? I asked earlier but you didn’t see it lol


Sorry, Stevie!

No budget requirements. You can write as expensive as you want, but as you know, I'm sure, if you want to see your script produced low budget gives you a much better chance. :)
Posted by: stevie, July 29th, 2018, 6:59pm; Reply: 59
Cheers Pia
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), July 29th, 2018, 8:11pm; Reply: 60
Minimum $5 Million budget!!!

;D ;D ;D
Posted by: MGray, July 29th, 2018, 8:52pm; Reply: 61
My first OWC. Very cool. Interesting challenge elements.Writing dialogue is likely my favorite part of screenwriting, so this is a nice stretch. Draft is almost complete. I'd love to see it as a short, so that's at least one person.
Good luck to everyone!
Posted by: SAC, July 30th, 2018, 5:51am; Reply: 62
One down.
Posted by: IamGlenn, July 30th, 2018, 8:09am; Reply: 63
An idea came to me last night, finally. Now, to write it.
Posted by: ReneC, July 30th, 2018, 9:18am; Reply: 64

Quoted from MGray
My first OWC. Very cool. Interesting challenge elements.Writing dialogue is likely my favorite part of screenwriting, so this is a nice stretch. Draft is almost complete. I'd love to see it as a short, so that's at least one person.
Good luck to everyone!


Fresh blood!  ;D

Welcome to the OWC, good luck with it!
Posted by: CameronD, July 30th, 2018, 12:38pm; Reply: 65
No dialogue. Great story. 60 seconds. You can do it!

Posted by: IamGlenn, July 30th, 2018, 1:41pm; Reply: 66
Does the summer heat/coldness have to be a main part of the story or can it just take part on hot/cold Summer's day?

Stupid question, maybe. But I don't want to get torn into for not focusing on the weather enough.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, July 30th, 2018, 2:10pm; Reply: 67
The heat or cold should have some effect on the story or characters. It does not have to be about the weather. However, simply writing that the sun beats down on the desert or that heat shimmers off the blacktop is not enough.

Btw, this is an excellent short thriller with no dialogue. It's a perfect edge of your seat kind of film.  :)


CURVE from Lodestone Films on Vimeo.

Posted by: DarrenJamesSeeley, July 30th, 2018, 3:18pm; Reply: 68
>:(

I don't know.
I think i might pass on this one.
Posted by: LC, July 30th, 2018, 6:53pm; Reply: 69
Curve is terrific, had me on tenterhooks - except for the ending. I don't know what to make of it.  Anyone clarify?

This is one of my favs:

Lucky

https://youtu.be/8wjcmAshkzI

And:

Bomb

https://youtu.be/8iuNO8ot4H0

Can't embed from my tablet, sorry.

I've posted these examples before. Big fan. ;D

The second example Cam posted: too twee for me. I get it that you're trying to inspire people so all good there, but I hope I won't have to read too many advertisement and public service announcement scripts.

* Pia, what was your no dialogue script about for your inaugural OWC in '06? Really curious.
Posted by: MGray, July 30th, 2018, 10:53pm; Reply: 70

Quoted from ReneC


Fresh blood!  ;D

Welcome to the OWC, good luck with it!


Thanks for the welcome, Rene! I'm looking forward to reading your OWC!
Posted by: SAC, July 30th, 2018, 10:54pm; Reply: 71
Is something wrong with the submission link? I keep getting an error message saying the "path I've taken is wrong." Weird. That's never happened before. Anyone else having this issue?
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), July 31st, 2018, 1:16am; Reply: 72

Quoted from MGray


Thanks for the welcome, Rene! I'm looking forward to reading your OWC!


Welcome MGray!! Assuming you ain't any relation...best of luck with the challenge and remember it's anonymous so keep your name off the front, and to review some other folks stuff (sorry, but had issues re this in the last one gone).

Best,

Cam
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, July 31st, 2018, 2:34am; Reply: 73

Quoted from SAC
Is something wrong with the submission link? I keep getting an error message saying the "path I've taken is wrong." Weird. That's never happened before. Anyone else having this issue?


Was it a wise old person by the name of Obi-Wan-Kanobi who whispered this message?
Posted by: FrankM, July 31st, 2018, 6:49am; Reply: 74

Quoted from MarkRenshaw
Was it a wise old person by the name of Obi-Wan-Kanobi who whispered this message?


You know, I think he might mean Old Ben Kanobi...
Posted by: SAC, July 31st, 2018, 7:08am; Reply: 75

Quoted from MarkRenshaw


Was it a wise old person by the name of Obi-Wan-Kanobi who whispered this message?


Most paths I've taken are wrong.

But seriously...

I really can't submit. Maybe Don can email the link to me. I have no clue what the frig is going on.
Posted by: LC, July 31st, 2018, 7:48am; Reply: 76
Posted by: ReneC, July 31st, 2018, 9:08am; Reply: 77

Quoted from FrankM


You know, I think he might mean Old Ben Kanobi...


Posted by: SAC, July 31st, 2018, 9:11am; Reply: 78

Quoted from LC


Thanks. Don said it was fixed so I’ll give it another whirl.
Posted by: SAC, July 31st, 2018, 10:39am; Reply: 79
Worked. Thank you, Obi-Don. You're my only hope.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), July 31st, 2018, 4:17pm; Reply: 80

Quoted from Grandma Bear
Btw, this is an excellent short thriller with no dialogue. It's a perfect edge of your seat kind of film.  :)


CURVE from Lodestone Films on Vimeo.



Yeah, this is very well done...BUT...it wouldn't work at all in screenplay format, because nothing happens.

The waves in the beginning make no sense to me.

The ending?  Well, there isn't an ending, sadly.

But, it's quite intense, and the acting is great!

Posted by: Reef Dreamer, July 31st, 2018, 4:20pm; Reply: 81
It may feel like a long time, I’m really out of touch with writing,  but the old writing habits return....alas.

Same old issues. Damn...them

Yet, for some reason, all my bloody IT seems to have changed - nothing bloody works, or connects, or talks etc why? COMPUTERS!!

Anyway, I’m still working on it and hope to take part - feels like a long time

In a kind of strange way, yes it is strange, I’m looking forward to Jeff and his slugs and orphans etc  :D

bet that hasn’t changed
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), July 31st, 2018, 4:36pm; Reply: 82

Quoted from Reef Dreamer
In a kind of strange way, yes it is strange, I’m looking forward to Jeff and his slugs and orphans etc  :D

bet that hasn’t changed


Some things never change!   ;D ;D ;D ;D

Posted by: ReneC, July 31st, 2018, 4:53pm; Reply: 83

Quoted from Dreamscale

Yeah, this is very well done...BUT...it wouldn't work at all in screenplay format, because nothing happens.


Of course it works in screenplay format. That's exactly what we're doing for this OWC.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), July 31st, 2018, 5:05pm; Reply: 84

Quoted from ReneC
Of course it works in screenplay format. That's exactly what we're doing for this OWC.


I get what you're saying, but chances are extremely good that written by even a very good writer, this would not read well at all.

It runs over 9 minutes, but if you really think about it, could you write even 5 pages of this?  And, if you could, would you expect anyone to enjoy those 5 pages?  I don't think so.

This works based on 2 things - the acting and the production.  That's it.  There's no story here, nothing makes any sense, and to top it all off, there's no ending.  And, let's remember those waves in the first minute - WTF is that supposed to be?

Posted by: JEStaats, July 31st, 2018, 5:34pm; Reply: 85
The writer for Curve ran short a page for a OWC and just added waves.
Posted by: irish eyes, July 31st, 2018, 5:55pm; Reply: 86
What is this?  Do my eyes deceive me? An OWC that doesn't mention 'Pissers'  ;D

Time to crawl back outta by hole.

It's only been a few years ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: LC, July 31st, 2018, 5:57pm; Reply: 87
Re Curve: There is a story imh. The waves, I agree, looked disconnected like ocean swell - even though there are plenty of accounts here in Oz, at least, of people dam surfing - really dangerous, and a lot of water goes through dams. But this one's empty, so why the water except for adding atmosphere?

She's knocked out or asleep when we first see her, so you immediately get: how did she get here? And you also see how perilous her situation is. Then there's a noise from below - a howling? That added a creepy supernatural element to it, and that she's not the first. It's a terrifying premise - not having anything to hold on to.

Add a bloody hand, and... There's nothing quite like a bloody fingernail ripped from the nailbed and hanging by a thread.

The ending was a bit of a letdown. If the chain around her neck now wrapped around her hand is to provide traction, I didn't buy it.

Do I care about the end? Not really, Cause the ride was so suspenseful and so much fun. Well, maybe a little bit I care...

It would read well in  the hands of a skilled writer.

It's also a good exercise in running a script through our heads, imagining the action taking place, instead of picking apart the writing.
Posted by: stevie, July 31st, 2018, 6:43pm; Reply: 88

Quoted from irish eyes
What is this?  Do my eyes deceive me? An OWC that doesn't mention 'Pissers'  ;D

Time to crawl back outta by hole.

It's only been a few years ;D ;D ;D


No dialogue in this bro so slapstick comedy the go (with a suspenseful bit thrown in)

Your Pisser then becomes Piss Stick
Posted by: Warren, July 31st, 2018, 6:51pm; Reply: 89
I really wanted to be in this one and thought I'd sneak in enough time to get it done, but it’s not looking possible unless I get something down tonight which is very unlikely.

My biggest issue would be getting all the reviews done as I fly out to Iceland tomorrow.

Hopefully there is another no dialogue challenge down the track.

I'll definitely be in the next OWC.

Good luck everyone.
Posted by: LC, July 31st, 2018, 6:52pm; Reply: 90
Iceland?
There's gotta be a story in that.
Posted by: SAC, July 31st, 2018, 6:53pm; Reply: 91

Quoted from irish eyes
What is this?  Do my eyes deceive me? An OWC that doesn't mention 'Pissers'  ;D

Time to crawl back outta by hole.

It's only been a few years ;D ;D ;D


IT LIVES!! Can’t think of anything funny to say about you at the moment. Strange.
Posted by: irish eyes, July 31st, 2018, 7:10pm; Reply: 92

Quoted from Sharon
IT LIVES!! Can’t think of anything funny to say about you at the moment. Strange.


Ohh how I don't miss you
Had to shut Facebook down due to  your overwhelming likes  of  my beach photos ;D
Posted by: irish eyes, July 31st, 2018, 7:13pm; Reply: 93

Quoted from Stevie
No dialogue in this bro so slapstick comedy the go (with a suspenseful bit thrown in)

Your Pisser then becomes Piss Stick


STEVIE!   How the hell are ya?... A Piss Stick isn't that pregnancy test ;D
Posted by: SAC, July 31st, 2018, 7:23pm; Reply: 94

Quoted from Margaret


Ohh how I don't miss you
Had to shut Facebook down due to  your overwhelming likes  of  my beach photos ;D


Oh, those beach pics were something else! You’re so white the sun has to wear sunglasses.

Posted by: Pale Yellow, July 31st, 2018, 8:06pm; Reply: 95

Quoted from irish eyes


It's only been a few years ;D ;D ;D


Seems like forever Irish!
Posted by: irish eyes, July 31st, 2018, 8:28pm; Reply: 96

Quoted from Sweet D
Seems like forever Irish!


I know the beer has helped me get through it ;D
I was scouring through old emails ( for some reason I don't delete them) and what did I come across from DEC 2011 ... THE DOLL  Your first feature.

Your still one of my fav writers/storytellers :D
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 1st, 2018, 7:19am; Reply: 97

Quoted from irish eyes


I know the beer has helped me get through it ;D
I was scouring through old emails ( for some reason I don't delete them) and what did I come across from DEC 2011 ... THE DOLL  Your first feature.

Your still one of my fav writers/storytellers :D


Fellow red, good to see you

I’ve been away probably about the same amount of time - haven’t written in ages.

Back to more important topics, I like our squad this year. Just got to stop the goals going in!! And Is it me but was Shakari a snip for £12m?

All the best

Posted by: irish eyes, August 1st, 2018, 8:34am; Reply: 98
Bill !
What's happening bro? Glad to see you're back writing.
I won't hijack the thread on football stuff and Steve Clark bashing cuz both are too easy... But looking forward to this season more than in the last 10 years... Great transfers fellow red
YNWA
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 9:42am; Reply: 99

Quoted from irish eyes
What is this?  Do my eyes deceive me? An OWC that doesn't mention 'Pissers'  ;D

Time to crawl back outta by hole.

It's only been a few years ;D ;D ;D


We are in great need of a few pissers!!!

Welcome back!

Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 10:53am; Reply: 100

Quoted from Dreamscale


We are in great need of a few pissers!!!

Welcome back!



That's not what you said last time you read one of mine...

Nice to see thee again Irish, and also Reefie and Stevie! It's gonna be a strong line up this time.
Posted by: ReneC, August 1st, 2018, 1:09pm; Reply: 101
Just to share an observation, these scripts are likely to break the rule of thumb of one page = one minute of screen time. Dialogue is what makes that rule of thumb work, often by using up pages that might otherwise not be there as characters act or vistas linger on the screen for the same period of time.

A good example is "All Is Lost" (which is a terrific sample of what we're doing here if you want to see how it's done really well). That script was 32 pages for an almost 90 minute movie. Each important action in the script plays out across a minute or more on screen, so one page often translates to four or five minutes of screen time.

Our little 6 page scripts could easily become 10-15 minute shorts when filmed. Think about that when picturing it playing out, give the action time to breathe on the screen in your head.
Posted by: JEStaats, August 1st, 2018, 1:31pm; Reply: 102
Submitted. Damn fine challenge. Good luck, all!
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 1:53pm; Reply: 103

Quoted from ReneC
Just to share an observation, these scripts are likely to break the rule of thumb of one page = one minute of screen time. Dialogue is what makes that rule of thumb work, often by using up pages that might otherwise not be there as characters act or vistas linger on the screen for the same period of time.

A good example is "All Is Lost" (which is a terrific sample of what we're doing here if you want to see how it's done really well). That script was 32 pages for an almost 90 minute movie. Each important action in the script plays out across a minute or more on screen, so one page often translates to four or five minutes of screen time.

Our little 6 page scripts could easily become 10-15 minute shorts when filmed. Think about that when picturing it playing out, give the action time to breathe on the screen in your head.


It's a fair point, but much like fingerprints everyone's got their own individual styles. You could have a Sorkin 180 page rambler with monstrous descriptions, or you could read a skinflint dialogue heavy sitcom script.

Sometimes it kills me round these parts when folk start banging on about over descriptiveness, as it's done ad nauseum in the real world where one page doesn't necessarily come close to one minute. I suspect it is something to do with being used to reading short scripts and expecting to be able to fly through them.

In my book, and all opinions are valid, so long as the descriptions work and the formatting is down pat, the script is a valid entry. It's the story that really should make it click...
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 2:26pm; Reply: 104

Quoted from Cameron
It's a fair point, but much like fingerprints everyone's got their own individual styles. You could have a Sorkin 180 page rambler with monstrous descriptions, or you could read a skinflint dialogue heavy sitcom script.

Sometimes it kills me round these parts when folk start banging on about over descriptiveness, as it's done ad nauseum in the real world where one page doesn't necessarily come close to one minute. I suspect it is something to do with being used to reading short scripts and expecting to be able to fly through them.

In my book, and all opinions are valid, so long as the descriptions work and the formatting is down pat, the script is a valid entry. It's the story that really should make it click...


Visual writing is always the goal.  A good writer can write in a way that a "good reader" can see exactly what he or she wants them to.

The problem is that few are good readers and even fewer are good writers.

As to the story being king, well, that really comes down to one's opinion.  There are very few stories that are universally good or great.  At least IMO.
Posted by: eldave1, August 1st, 2018, 2:32pm; Reply: 105
Had time to work on one this morning. Might get one in. I just need to tweak the dialogue .
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 3:15pm; Reply: 106

Quoted from Dreamscale


Visual writing is always the goal.  A good writer can write in a way that a "good reader" can see exactly what he or she wants them to.

The problem is that few are good readers and even fewer are good writers.

As to the story being king, well, that really comes down to one's opinion.  There are very few stories that are universally good or great.  At least IMO.


Come on Dave...it's been a while since I've seen you on one of these fun trips!!!

Sorry, but just can't agree in any way, shape or form with the above. If you ain't got a story you ain't got a script. You can have as many visual ticks and tricks as you want, but they have to be coupled with an actual story.

If you wade into a script with the impression that the formatting and style is what's going to make it special, you're on a one way ticked to pain town...and really, can't you think of more than a very few good stories?? That's slightly troubling if you mean throughout the cinematic world.

Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 3:25pm; Reply: 107
By the way, that's not me saying you can't tell a story through visual means, the entire point of this challenge is such a task. I'm saying you actually need a story, and the story is key and you'll always fail without a good one.
Posted by: ReneC, August 1st, 2018, 3:26pm; Reply: 108

Quoted from eldave1
Had time to work on one this morning. Might get one in. I just need to tweak the dialogue .


Funny. :D
Posted by: FrankM, August 1st, 2018, 3:26pm; Reply: 109

Quoted from eldave1
I just need to tweak the dialogue .


Say no more.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 3:38pm; Reply: 110

Quoted from Cameron
Sorry, but just can't agree in any way, shape or form with the above. If you ain't got a story you ain't got a script. You can have as many visual ticks and tricks as you want, but they have to be coupled with an actual story.

If you wade into a script with the impression that the formatting is what's going to make it special, you're on a one way ticked to pain town...and really, can't you think of more than a very few good stories?? That's slightly troubling if you mean throughout the cinematic world.


Cam, you're taking my comments totally out of context.  Keep in mind my comments were in response to a post of yours, which you completely neglected here.

"Good Visual" writing is exactly that - it's good and it's visual, which is good.  The problem is that unless the reader is a "good" reader, they're not going to get it...or see it.  That was 1 of my points.

The other point is that there are seriously very, very few stories that are universally good or great (very few in terms of relationship to all...or percentage).  Not everyone wil agree that this or that story is so great...or even good.  That should be very easy to understand.

Great writing jumps off the page...right into your mind's eye, and that's the difference here.

Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 4:14pm; Reply: 111

Quoted from Dreamscale


Cam, you're taking my comments totally out of context.  Keep in mind my comments were in response to a post of yours, which you completely neglected here.

"Good Visual" writing is exactly that - it's good and it's visual, which is good.  The problem is that unless the reader is a "good" reader, they're not going to get it...or see it.  That was 1 of my points.

The other point is that there are seriously very, very few stories that are universally good or great (very few in terms of relationship to all...or percentage).  Not everyone wil agree that this or that story is so great...or even good.  That should be very easy to understand.

Great writing jumps off the page...right into your mind's eye, and that's the difference here.



Alright Dreamscale,

Don't worry, I already figured this was a reply to my comment, however if anyone thinks that they can avoid making the story the focal point of their work then they are not going to get very far...

Anyway, if you genuinely can't think of anything beyond a very few great, or even good, stories we're in trouble here.

In short. It's late over here, I'm in bed, and it's definitely too early in the challenge for one of these daft arguments revolving around a ridiculous statement. To quote a familiar saying in these OWC's, I'm out.

Nighty night x
Posted by: irish eyes, August 1st, 2018, 4:34pm; Reply: 112

Quoted from Mr Bush
We are in great need of a few pissers!!!

Welcome back!


Thanks Bud

I noticed the quality of scripts have risen since I've been gone... coincidence I think not ;D ;D
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 4:44pm; Reply: 113

Quoted from Cameron
Don't worry, I already figured this was a reply to my comment, however if anyone thinks that they can avoid making the story the focal point of their work then they are not going to get very far...

Anyway, if you genuinely can't think of anything beyond a very few great, or even good, stories we're in trouble here.

In short. It's late over here, I'm in bed, and it's definitely too early in the challenge for one of these daft arguments revolving around a ridiculous statement. To quote a familiar saying in these OWC's, I'm out.

Nighty night x


Again, you continue to not understand a very, VERY simple concept I'm talking about - good stories.  There are very, very few good stories...even less great ones.

I don't know how many movies you watch or how closely you keep tabs on movies at the box office, but I see ALOT!  And I keep very close tabs on all movies, whether or not I watch them.  And I can confidently tell you again, stories are not the strong point of most successful films...because, they've basically all been told...over and over.

Sure, you can change this and change that, but it's rare to see something new, fresh, and unique.  I thought this was common knowledge?  No?

Let's take the vid that was embedded on this thread that many have commented on - Curve.  There is ZERO story there...ZERO!  There's zero characterization.  It's not even a cohesive piece, in terms of a beginning, middle and end.  In fact, there's no ending.

Yet, it seems to work for everyone who commented on it.  You get what I'm saying here, or not?

Hopefully, you dream up some wonderful new story/plot tonight.  I can't wait to read it!

;D ;D ;D ;D

Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 4:45pm; Reply: 114

Quoted from irish eyes
Thanks Bud

I noticed the quality of scripts have risen since I've been gone... coincidence I think not ;D ;D


That's a matter of opinion.   ;D ;D ;D ;D

Posted by: Pale Yellow, August 1st, 2018, 8:03pm; Reply: 115

Quoted from irish eyes

DEC 2011 ... THE DOLL  Your first feature.



OMG I cannot believe you read that thing! :) haha
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 1st, 2018, 8:08pm; Reply: 116

Quoted from Pale Yellow
OMG I cannot believe you read that thing! :) haha


DENA!!!!!  YES!!!!!  Miss you, Girl!!

Posted by: Gary in Houston, August 1st, 2018, 8:09pm; Reply: 117
  
Posted by: Zack, August 1st, 2018, 8:30pm; Reply: 118

Quoted from Gary in Houston
  


        
Posted by: LC, August 1st, 2018, 10:30pm; Reply: 119
Hawk and Zack are speechless,  :D so I'll weigh in.

This has been a very good exercise for me even though so far I have nothing to submit... Not yet, anyway.

I wrote out two and then realised they were too big a story (stories) packed into 6 pages. I realised both would come across more as 'silent films' rather than not needing dialogue at all, if that makes sense.

Curve worked for me cause it's basically someone hanging off a cliff. That's all it is, but it's also loaded with emotion. We watch, we put ourselves in that place, we wonder how, what, when, why. Those things are never answered. It's literally someone hanging on by their finger nails. It's raw suspense. We come to see she's doomed. And yet we hope she might just make it. It's not fair she's in the situation she's in - in that regard it could happen to any of us. Same opening scene with Saw. They don't know how they got there. Same with Buried, I think - although they made a feature length of that too.

'Bedfellows' -  brilliantly scary.
https://youtu.be/WQvGmMVBYMw

Lights Out - effective too.

Some people can write a terrific one pager, or even those 'blink and you might miss it' films - what are they called?

I think with this challenge if you've got too many words on the page there might be something too complex in the idea.

Still trying here, but hope is fading fast.  :-/



Posted by: MGray, August 1st, 2018, 11:19pm; Reply: 120
Will we receive an email confirmation for our OWC submissions? I haven't received one, and I don't want to miss out on the action!
Posted by: LC, August 1st, 2018, 11:42pm; Reply: 121
Yep, Don usually sends an email. He might not be up yet.

You won't miss out. :)
Posted by: MGray, August 1st, 2018, 11:52pm; Reply: 122
Great. Thanks!
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, August 2nd, 2018, 2:30am; Reply: 123
Had a few peeps read my first draft and got enough feedback to start on a second. A second draft is a rare thing for me in a OWC.

As for what makes a good script/story; well as all things in life it is about balance. A good story is one that people enjoy, understand and remember fondly. A good script is one that can be read easily, understand and visualise clearly. Combine the two, and you have it made. A lot of writers are good at one, or the other; rarely both.

A script without dialogue isn’t easy, anyone who attempts this OWC and enters deserves a pat on the back and secret masonic handshake in my opinion. I do imagine some will down score scripts for  including unfilmables and a none dialogue script may include more unfilmables than the norm. But again just consider balance. If it’s mainly prose, then yeah it’s not a screenplay but a bit of artistic flair is good. Most produced (famous) scripts have unfilmables in them. Most notably with character descriptions.

It seems to be accepted inside the industry to have a character description which says less about what they look like and what they are wearing (which changes during production anyway) and more about what type of person they are. Similar some action is described not simply as exactly what we see on screen, but with a few words which describe the tone, mood and atmosphere of the setting far more eloquently than “The man enters the small house.”   Balance Padawans, baalAAAANCE! (Falls off Luke Skywalker’s shoulders.)
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 2nd, 2018, 3:20am; Reply: 124

i think this OWC will throw up a big variation. And with that we should be open minded.

some will be short scenes, or contained shorts, others maybe larger templates.

since the criteria is open, i wouldn't mark one against the other - it's more a case of did the story work as written.

as well as did it have a feel of the summer/winter request - some OWC entries have drifted a long way off the criteria in the past (mine included)

Also, no dialogue can make scripts harder work for the reader, probably why it is six pages. a good idea.

it may be that readers need to slow down a touch to absorb the information which could be denser than normal.

anyway, good fun to play again
Posted by: LC, August 2nd, 2018, 4:14am; Reply: 125
And...

Make sure it has...

That element of suspense.

That is one of the specific requirements of this particular challenge.
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 2nd, 2018, 4:52am; Reply: 126
‘Element of suspense’

Sounds like a perfume  ;D

Mine has one big surprise...it’s bloody written. That’s the surprise!!
Posted by: Anon, August 2nd, 2018, 6:17am; Reply: 127
Never written a short before. But when I read the rules / subject matter one just popped into my head. It's a lunch-break job but have to say - really enjoyed writing it. So I've thrown it into the mix.
Posted by: CindyLKeller, August 2nd, 2018, 8:21am; Reply: 128
Really busy at work, but I just thought of a short to write. Hopefully I can get it written after work tonight.
Posted by: eldave1, August 2nd, 2018, 11:14am; Reply: 129
Done and done.  Interesting exercise - and I hate exercising in the heat (hmm - never mind, I just hate exercising).

Posted by: ajr, August 2nd, 2018, 1:11pm; Reply: 130
I finally had a germ of an idea, but doesn't look like I'll have time to write it.

I don't enter a lot of these because with the one week deadline, I only really get a few hours to do the actual writing.

Food for thought, for the future, for those of us who work a lot of hours during the week - maybe announce the theme on a Monday, this way we have all week to think about it and then the weekend to write it?

Announcing on a Friday means I have to have an instant idea, and then have the bones in place by Sunday night.

AJR
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 2nd, 2018, 1:28pm; Reply: 131
I also had an idea finally, but we're running out of time, so not sure I will get to write it...but I will try.
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 2nd, 2018, 4:33pm; Reply: 132
I am still trying, but it’s been a while. Well that’s what my wife says  :K)

I promise I’m gonna be in - time to return. Even if a little half hearted.

Seems like a few other ‘old’ timers may join in - that would be fun.

Except you Jeff, you can sod off for all the orphans crap you gave me those years ago.  :D :( :D

Only joking.

Just don’t miss a coma... :o

Remember it’s all about story... 8)
Posted by: stevie, August 2nd, 2018, 4:38pm; Reply: 133

Quoted from Reef Dreamer
I am still trying, but it’s been a while. Well that’s what my wife says  :K)

I promise I’m gonna be in - time to return. Even if a little half hearted.

Seems like a few other ‘old’ timers may join in - that would be fun.

Except you Jeff, you can sod off for all the orphans crap you gave me those years ago.  :D :( :D

Only joking.

Just don’t miss a coma... :o

Remember it’s all about story... 8)


Jeff’s love life has been in a coma for years bro  ;D
Posted by: Gary in Houston, August 2nd, 2018, 7:30pm; Reply: 134
Posted by: SAC, August 2nd, 2018, 7:36pm; Reply: 135

Quoted from stevie


Jeff’s love life has been in a coma for years bro  ;D


So that’s why he’s always out so quick.
Posted by: LC, August 2nd, 2018, 8:20pm; Reply: 136
Okay, Hawk...

What's up with the comment/ no comment?
Last minute self censoring?   :D
...
Very funny, Steven Clark!
Posted by: FrankM, August 2nd, 2018, 8:25pm; Reply: 137

Quoted from LC
Okay, Hawk...

What's up with the comment/ no comment?


I took it as a zero-dialogue comment.
Posted by: Lightfoot, August 2nd, 2018, 8:37pm; Reply: 138
The scripts are due on my birthday.  :)

Got mine done but will use tomorrow to polish it up a bit when I find the time, or if I find the time.
Posted by: LC, August 2nd, 2018, 8:50pm; Reply: 139

Quoted from FrankM
I took it as a zero-dialogue comment.

  ;D


Posted by: Zack, August 2nd, 2018, 9:47pm; Reply: 140
I didn't think I'd be able to enter this OWC, but an idea hit me the other night and I ran with it. It may be a bit ambitious for a 6 page script, but to Hell with it. I had a ton of fun writing it.

Can't wait to see what cool ideas you guys have come up with.

Zack
Posted by: FrankM, August 2nd, 2018, 9:49pm; Reply: 141

Quoted from LC

  ;D


I am convinced the entire purpose of the zero-dialogue requirement is prevent anyone from saying "Hot enough for ya?"
Posted by: CameronD, August 2nd, 2018, 10:35pm; Reply: 142
Struggling with this one. For once I have an idea with no solid ending in mind. At least one that will be satisfying for an OWC like this. We will see what I can do but I can already envision the comments saying the ending fell flat. You guys are so harsh. :)  
Posted by: SAC, August 2nd, 2018, 11:24pm; Reply: 143

Quoted from LC

Very funny, Steven Clark!


I have my moments!

Well, I'm all submitted and done. Never, ever, during editing have I gone back and just changed numerous words over and over again. Anyone else do this or is it just me?
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 1:28am; Reply: 144

Quoted from LC
Okay, Hawk...

What's up with the comment/ no comment?
Last minute self censoring?


Building suspense??
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, August 3rd, 2018, 3:24am; Reply: 145
Second draft done, gonna do a final polish tonight, come up with a logline and submit that bad boy, and maybe my script as well.

Looking forward to reading these, with the 6 page limit it will make it easier to read through more.
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 4:15am; Reply: 146

Quoted from MarkRenshaw
Second draft done, gonna do a final polish tonight, come up with a logline and submit that bad boy, and maybe my script as well.

Looking forward to reading these, with the 6 page limit it will make it easier to read through more.


You should be right, Mark. Just remembered you made this one with minimal dialogue previously... http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-0117OWC/m-1485617787/s-0/
Posted by: ChrisBodily, August 3rd, 2018, 5:52am; Reply: 147
Just submitted. An idea popped into my head that seemed like a no brainer and I just ran with it, no matter how rough the idea was initially. Three drafts, and it feels fully formed.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 9:21am; Reply: 148

Quoted from stevie
Jeff’s love life has been in a coma for years bro  ;D


True that, but my sex life with my left hand is going very strong.

;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

Posted by: MarkRenshaw, August 3rd, 2018, 10:28am; Reply: 149

Quoted from Cameron


You should be right, Mark. Just remembered you made this one with minimal dialogue previously... http://www.simplyscripts.net/cgi-bin/Blah/Blah.pl?b-0117OWC/m-1485617787/s-0/


Indeed! I love Atoll's Edge, even though I say so myself. I think it would be perfect for an animated short but alas, no-one has shown any interest.

Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 3rd, 2018, 11:46am; Reply: 150
11 hours left. I'm looking forward to see what you all came up with. Wish I could take part.  :)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 12:05pm; Reply: 151
Just getting started.  ARGH!!!

I have about 4 hours tops, and I need to get to the gym also.  Going to be close.

I'm going to do my best to throw something together.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 12:12pm; Reply: 152
I'm assuming, since nothing has been said to lead me not assume this, that we can set our scripts anywhere, as long as the heat or cold conforms to where we actually live.

For instance, I'm not setting mine in AZ, as that would be a giveaway.
Posted by: Zack, August 3rd, 2018, 12:33pm; Reply: 153

Quoted from Dreamscale
I'm assuming, since nothing has been said to lead me not assume this, that we can set our scripts anywhere, as long as the heat or cold conforms to where we actually live.

For instance, I'm not setting mine in AZ, as that would be a giveaway.


I was wondering the same thing.

Zack
Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 3rd, 2018, 12:47pm; Reply: 154
It can take place anywhere, but if you live in the northern hemisphere, you have to write a story where the summer heat has to play a part. It doesn't have to be about the heat, just has to be hot.
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, August 3rd, 2018, 1:06pm; Reply: 155
Submissive, I mean submitted. Actually I mean both.
Posted by: irish eyes, August 3rd, 2018, 1:15pm; Reply: 156

Quoted from Dreamscale
I have about 4 hours tops, and I need to get to the gym also.  Going to be close.


Kill 2 birds with 1 stone and write it when you're on the Thigh Master 2000
Posted by: Zack, August 3rd, 2018, 1:20pm; Reply: 157

Quoted from irish eyes


Kill 2 birds with 1 stone and write it when you're on the Thigh Master 2000


Or kill 1 bird with 2 stones and just hop on the Ass Blaster 4000.

Zack
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 1:54pm; Reply: 158
;D ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

Funny stuff!

Shockingly, this thing is writing itself, and I haven't even had any Jager.

I will be in...100% guaranteed!  But, will anyone like it?  That is the question.

We'll see.  Look forward to reading everyone's entry and hope to see some good pissers from Stevie and our long lost Irish buddy.
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 3rd, 2018, 2:30pm; Reply: 159

Quoted from Zack


Or kill 1 bird with 2 stones and just hop on the Ass Blaster 4000.

Zack


Nothing wrong with the ass blaster 4000....god that’s sounds wrong. Ahem, I just heard about it that’s all.

Nothing to see here, move along...

Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 2:45pm; Reply: 160
Well, I'm actually done, but I'm feeling like Bill now, as I have absolutely no idea how to get my title page to appear, nor do I know how to save this as a pdf.

WTF?

Has it really been so long that I completely forgot this stuff?

Unreal.
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 3rd, 2018, 2:57pm; Reply: 161

Quoted from Dreamscale
Well, I'm actually done, but I'm feeling like Bill now, as I have absolutely no idea how to get my title page to appear, nor do I know how to save this as a pdf.

WTF?

Has it really been so long that I completely forgot this stuff?

Unreal.


Thank the lord I am not alone. And it’s not just the voices...
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 3:09pm; Reply: 162

Quoted from Reef Dreamer
Thank the lord I am not alone. And it’s not just the voices...


You are definitely not alone, my friend!

I figured it all out.  Maybe I was panicking, even though I have 7+ hours still.  Or maybe, it's the Jager calling me from the freezer, "Jeff!  Jeffrey!!!  It's time, my friend.  Stop writing and let's start the party!"

;D ;D ;D

Posted by: SAC, August 3rd, 2018, 3:14pm; Reply: 163

Quoted from MarkRenshaw
Submissive, I mean submitted. Actually I mean both.


Lol. You should write comedy, Mark.
Posted by: realxwriter, August 3rd, 2018, 4:37pm; Reply: 164
If you don't have anyone to check your script before submitting it, find a way to send it to me anonymously to my gmail account realxwriter and I will do my best to check it for you before the dealine. It's 22:36 now where I live. Best of luck everyone.
Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 3rd, 2018, 4:39pm; Reply: 165

Quoted from realxwriter
If you don't have anyone to check your script before submitting it, find a way to send it to me anonymously to my gmail account realxwriter and I will do my best to check it for you before the dealine. It's 22:36 now where I live. Best of luck everyone.


That's nice of you! Anyone interested can email me your script and I can forward it, if your email is too obvious.  8)
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 5:00pm; Reply: 166
It’s the final countdown, NA NA NA, NA, NA NA NA NA NA... ah Europe, whatever became of them? Who cares actually? This is going to be a good one, I can feel it.

But please, dear lord, say someone’s done a funny and we don’t just get lots of scripts with people looking at things in dramatic manners!!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 5:12pm; Reply: 167
OK, submitted!  Amazing I got this done, but I did have to skip the gym and I don't have the AssBlaster 400 at home, so the only work my arse got was sitting in my chair, writing this script.

This has to be the shortest script I've ever written and obviously the only one without dialogue.  Should be interesting to see how these all turned out.

I have numerous free hours tomorrow to read, so hoping The Don can do his usual yeoman job of a quick posting of some of the entries.

I'm assuming we'll have 30+ entries and at a 6 page max, this should be quite easy to get through every script.

Happy weekend to all!
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 5:17pm; Reply: 168

Quoted from Cameron
It’s the final countdown, NA NA NA, NA, NA NA NA NA NA... ah Europe, whatever became of them? Who cares actually?


What happened to Europe?  Nothing...they're still rocking out and have put out 6 awesome CD's since 2004.  1991's Prisoners in Paradise was their last before they rebanded in 2004.

Shockingly, they've really matured in terms of their sound and look.

One of my favorites still.  You should check out their "new stuff".

Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 5:18pm; Reply: 169

Quoted from Cameron
But please, dear lord, say someone’s done a funny and we don’t just get lots of scripts with people looking at things in dramatic manners!!


My entry has people looking at bare arses and bare breasts, to name just a few things that are "dramatically viewed".   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 6:51pm; Reply: 170
Where's the peeps?  C'mon, SS'ers!!!

Who's in?  Who's out?  Who's an arsehole...other than Stevie?   ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: Zack, August 3rd, 2018, 7:14pm; Reply: 171
Submitted. Alright Jeff, hop off the Ass Blaster 4000. It's my turn.

Zack
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 7:30pm; Reply: 172

Quoted from Zack
Submitted. Alright Jeff, hop off the Ass Blaster 4000. It's my turn.
Zack


My arse is off.  Stevie's big Aussie arse needs to jump on.

Zack, you're a skinny bro...you don't need the arseblaster 4000...maybe the 1000?

HA!!!!   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D

Posted by: eldave1, August 3rd, 2018, 7:42pm; Reply: 173

Quoted from Dreamscale
Where's the peeps?  C'mon, SS'ers!!!

Who's in?  Who's out?  Who's an arsehole...other than Stevie?   ;D ;D ;D


In. I can guarantee that none of my dialogue is on the nose.
Posted by: Zack, August 3rd, 2018, 7:49pm; Reply: 174

Quoted from Dreamscale


My arse is off.  Stevie's big Aussie arse needs to jump on.

Zack, you're a skinny bro...you don't need the arseblaster 4000...maybe the 1000?

HA!!!!   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D



I go hard, bro. :D

Zack
Posted by: Pale Yellow, August 3rd, 2018, 8:11pm; Reply: 175
Ass Blaster? You boys need to give a girl a turn! :)

Just SUBmitted. *wink*
Posted by: CindyLKeller, August 3rd, 2018, 8:31pm; Reply: 176
I'm in.
Posted by: irish eyes, August 3rd, 2018, 8:37pm; Reply: 177
This arsehole is in with flying colors
Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 3rd, 2018, 8:41pm; Reply: 178
VERY cool to see so many long time members take part!!!  Can't wait to read your scripts!  8)
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 3rd, 2018, 8:49pm; Reply: 179
Dena...get your arse on the arsebalster4000...Pia...you're up next.

My arse hurts from sitting on it all day.

Zack, you up next!!!

Where's Stevie?  His old arse needs to sit on a fucking fence for awhile!   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Posted by: SAC, August 3rd, 2018, 9:01pm; Reply: 180
This Assblaster business is all starting to sound weird and shit.

I’m next!! Where are the Clorox wipes anyway?
Posted by: stevie, August 3rd, 2018, 9:49pm; Reply: 181

Quoted from Grandma Bear
VERY cool to see so many long time members take part!!!  Can't wait to read your scripts!  8)


Jeff has been playing with his member for a long time. And the Arse Blaster has torn his cheeks apart.

As the Rams linebacker whispered to Jeff...I’m in  :'(
Posted by: ReneC, August 3rd, 2018, 10:19pm; Reply: 182

Quoted from Dreamscale
Dena...get your arse on the arsebalster4000...Pia...you're up next.

My arse hurts from sitting on it all day.

Zack, you up next!!!

Where's Stevie?  His old arse needs to sit on a fucking fence for awhile!   ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D


Jeff, we've gathered here today because we're concerned about your recent obsession with arses. We just want you to know, we love you, we're here for you, and we want to help you through this confusing, scary time.

Submitted.  ;D
Posted by: Pale Yellow, August 3rd, 2018, 10:20pm; Reply: 183
This is like old times! :) Been a ride... and I've had fun writing this time!

Good job Pia and thanks to the Don!!!

Now the bed calls me. Too much arse blasting I reckon. :)
Posted by: irish eyes, August 3rd, 2018, 10:27pm; Reply: 184



You're welcome
Posted by: Pale Yellow, August 3rd, 2018, 10:34pm; Reply: 185
OMG Irish! I told you NOT to post pics of me at the gym!!! Damn you! :) Now they are gonna know how sexy I am! :) LMAO
Posted by: irish eyes, August 3rd, 2018, 10:43pm; Reply: 186

Quoted from Sexy D
OMG Irish! I told you NOT to post pics of me at the gym!!! Damn you!  Now they are gonna know how sexy I am!  LMAO


;D;D;D

Instead of a SS mug I think Don should give away one of these bad boys ;D
Posted by: DaveTroop, August 3rd, 2018, 10:45pm; Reply: 187
After almost no thought whatsoever, and absolutely zero regard for my self-esteem,
I have decided to partake in this writing challenge.  I understand that my foolish actions may result in public humiliation, defamation of character, or out-right slander.  Probably all of the above.

Thank you Pia and Don for hosting the party.

Good luck to all.
Posted by: CameronD, August 3rd, 2018, 10:46pm; Reply: 188
Good luck everybody. This will be an interesting one.
Posted by: SAC, August 3rd, 2018, 10:50pm; Reply: 189
So glad that I finished and submitted a few days ago. Past OWC's I'd be banging it out right about now and stressing.

Thankfully, now I can just stare at the wall.
Posted by: Dreamscale (Guest), August 4th, 2018, 12:27am; Reply: 190

Quoted from SAC
So glad that I finished and submitted to Stevie a few days ago. Past OWC's I'd be banging it out right about now and stressing, as Stevie rode me hard.

Thankfully, now I can just stare at the wall...and my arse isn't hurting, either


Steve, my brother...too much information!!!

;D ;D ;D ;D

Posted by: stevie, August 4th, 2018, 1:22am; Reply: 191

Quoted from Dreamscale


The Arse Blaster is my only true friend



You need to get out of those Arizona locker rooms buddy
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 4th, 2018, 2:03am; Reply: 192

Quoted from Pale Yellow
This is like old times! :) Been a ride... and I've had fun writing this time!

Good job Pia and thanks to the Don!!!

Now the bed calls me. Too much arse blasting I reckon. :)


But how many dena? The queen of multiple entries....oh no, with current thread that doesn’t sound right.

Otherwise, not having been around in a long while I don’t know who hasn’t been here either, but I recognise a lot of the names above. Cool.

My script won’t be a contender, I know it’s problems, but it was a joy to write again.
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 4th, 2018, 2:05am; Reply: 193

Quoted from DaveTroop
After almost no thought whatsoever, and absolutely zero regard for my self-esteem,
I have decided to partake in this writing challenge.  I understand that my foolish actions may result in public humiliation, defamation of character, or out-right slander.  Probably all of the above.

Thank you Pia and Don for hosting the party.

Good luck to all.


Mr troop - long time my old friend!! Good to cross paths once more.
Posted by: MarkRenshaw, August 4th, 2018, 3:47am; Reply: 194
It's Saturday so I dive in to read some of these scripts and see there's still hours left on the countdown timer.

CURSE YOU TIME DIFFERENCE!!
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 4th, 2018, 3:58am; Reply: 195
Mark - time is up they just haven’t been posted.

You can’t squeak in another entry now :D
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 4th, 2018, 7:01am; Reply: 196
Arghhjhh!!! Stuck on a ferry and want to read some beautiful words from some of the brilliant minds round here...the tension is killing me!!!

Script me, script me right in the face, please x
Posted by: LC, August 4th, 2018, 8:02am; Reply: 197
Shoulda stayed in Melbourne, Cam. You'd be just popping off to bed and then wake up to some brilliant scripts over your morning coffee.  :)
Posted by: CindyLKeller, August 4th, 2018, 8:18am; Reply: 198
Thanks to Don and Pia I am writing again.

I didn't have anyone check it before I submitted, :-/ and I'm usually off on the OWC, but some say I am a little off anyway...
BUT
I love it here and
there's no place like home. There's no place like home.
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 4th, 2018, 8:45am; Reply: 199

Quoted from LC
Shoulda stayed in Melbourne, Cam. You'd be just popping off to bed and then wake up to some brilliant scripts over your morning coffee.  :)


I should have stayed in Melbourne for that reason and so many more...seeing the wildlife (and I'm not talking of the animal variety) on the Belfast to Stranraer ferry was a right eye opener. It was like the Jerry Springer show on water
Posted by: Cameron (Guest), August 4th, 2018, 9:09am; Reply: 200
Hang about...SCRIPT O'CLOCK!!!! Good luck folkles and muchos gracias Pia and Don
Posted by: Zack, August 4th, 2018, 9:12am; Reply: 201

Quoted from Cameron


I should have stayed in Melbourne for that reason and so many more...seeing the wildlife (and I'm not talking of the animal variety) on the Belfast to Stranraer ferry was a right eye opener. It was like the Jerry Springer show on water


Sounds like someone had an entertaining morning! :) Time to dive into these scripts.

Zack
Posted by: LC, August 4th, 2018, 9:15am; Reply: 202

Quoted from Cameron


I should have stayed in Melbourne for that reason and so many more...seeing the wildlife (and I'm not talking of the animal variety) on the Belfast to Stranraer ferry was a right eye opener. It was like the Jerry Springer show on water

Sounds interesting to say the least.

Ooh, Script O'clock it is.
I shall stay up a little past my bedtime.

Thanks Don, and/or Pia, for posting them up pronto! :)
Posted by: Grandma Bear, August 4th, 2018, 9:22am; Reply: 203
Thanks to all who took part!  

A friendly reminder, DON'T grade the scripts in your review. It will be deleted!  ;)
Posted by: Reef Dreamer, August 4th, 2018, 9:42am; Reply: 204
thanks Don and Pia for running this

i see there has been a decent turn out and I'm not sure if they all have been posted
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