Quoted Text Hi Joshua.
To me, the story was unrealistic. Even from a "smoked-up" point of view. The ending was something out of the board game CLUEDO. Grammar and format needs attention. You appear to be new at screenwriting... and that's cool, we all started somehow and learnt as we went along. And of the best way is to read a lot of scripts, and to read-up on the craft of screenwriting. A good site is; screencraft.com |