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SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board / My Work In Progress / Witch Hunt WIP
Posted by: Zack, April 23rd, 2021, 7:18pm
Finally making some good progress on my next feature, my attempt to flip the home-invasion subgenre on its head. I've got a solid 40 pages written so far, but can't help but feel like it's missing something. Feels like it needs another layer. Would anyone be interested in giving me some feedback? :)
If I had to pitch the basic concept, I'd say it's an inverted take on Dog Soldiers, just switch out werewolves with witches, and with a similar tone to From Dusk Till Dawn. :)
Here's a (very messy) logline - After a horrific bus accident claims the lives of dozens of children, a group of grieving parents band together with a mysterious stranger to confront the sole survivors of the accident, a pair of creepy siblings who escaped without so much as a scratch.
If you're interested in taking a look, let me know and I'll send you the teaser. :)
Posted by: Warren, April 25th, 2021, 11:55pm; Reply: 1
Happy to take a look now that the Quickie is over and the next is a while away.
My email is on all my scripts.
Posted by: Zack, April 25th, 2021, 11:55pm; Reply: 2
Happy to take a look now that the Quickie is over and the next is a while away.
My email is on all my scripts.
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Hell yeah, Dude! Thanks. ;D I'll send it right over.
Anything you'd like me to look at in return?
Posted by: Warren, April 25th, 2021, 11:58pm; Reply: 3
Hell yeah, Dude! Thanks. ;D I'll send it right over.
Anything you'd like me to look at in return?
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I'm all good for the moment. thanks.
I'll dive in tomorrow :)
Posted by: Zack, April 26th, 2021, 12:07am; Reply: 4
No rush. Sent. :)
Thanks again!
Posted by: Warren, April 27th, 2021, 12:03am; Reply: 5
I'm 35 pages in, I have a lot of notes that I'll send over tomorrow when I finish it.
You definitely have something here IMO.
Posted by: Zack, April 27th, 2021, 12:19am; Reply: 6
I'm 35 pages in, I have a lot of notes that I'll send over tomorrow when I finish it.
You definitely have something here IMO. |
Awesome! Looking forward to reading your notes. Happy to hear you think I'm on to something. :)
Posted by: Zack, April 27th, 2021, 12:30am; Reply: 7
I've actually just finished up the first draft. It's short, only coming in at 68 pages, but I really like what I've got. That said, I still think it's missing something. A subplot or something. Gonna try to get this to at least 80 pages before I submit a draft here on SS.
Posted by: Warren, April 27th, 2021, 1:42am; Reply: 8
I've actually just finished up the first draft. It's short, only coming in at 68 pages, but I really like what I've got. That said, I still think it's missing something. A subplot or something. Gonna try to get this to at least 80 pages before I submit a draft here on SS. |
Can you send me the lot?
Posted by: Zack, April 27th, 2021, 1:58am; Reply: 9
Absolutely, just beware of the typos. Lol. Haven't had a chance to clean it up.
Posted by: Zack, April 27th, 2021, 2:03am; Reply: 10
Posted by: Warren, April 27th, 2021, 6:20pm; Reply: 11
Posted by: Warren, April 27th, 2021, 8:14pm; Reply: 12
so far, but can't help but feel like it's missing something. Feels like it needs another layer.
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I think I've given you some points to add that extra layer, or even layers, just not sure if it's a direction you'd want to go in. Interested to hear your thoughts.
Posted by: Zack, April 28th, 2021, 1:52am; Reply: 13
I think I've given you some points to add that extra layer, or even layers, just not sure if it's a direction you'd want to go in. Interested to hear your thoughts.
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Thanks for all the excellent notes!!! Definitely given me some great tips that will no doubt help me in the long run. Really appreciate it. :)
I'm very interested is discussing this script further with you. If you've got the time, of course. :)
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