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Posted by: Don, August 20th, 2022, 2:45pm

Jasper + Mimi Forever by Jason Allen - Short, Comedy, Romance - Two freakish outcasts - a bearded woman and a man who has a carrot for a penis - are madly in love and want to have a baby. 6 pages - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Posted by: Nomad, August 23rd, 2022, 12:24pm; Reply: 1

Comedy is so difficult to write since it's the most subjective genre.

This unfortunately fell flat.

Strange premise, weird dialogue, meh jokes instead of a good setup and payoff...

I applaud your effort writing comedy, but this didn't work for me.

-Jordan

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