Print Topic
SimplyScripts Screenwriting Discussion Board / Script Review Exchange / Halloween Screenplay ++ Black Story ++ 2 pages
Posted by: PedroS, October 31st, 2022, 5:53am
Posted by: Matthew Taylor, October 31st, 2022, 6:28am; Reply: 1
Happy Halloween.
Not sure what the bloody shirt was about, or why he shot himself. I came to my own conclusion that he murdered someone and was using the fact he was on the radio as an alibi (until it started looping, then the jig was up)
I'd change the scene heading to show the car is travelling and remove Texas.
Show us it's Texas by describing the landscape out of the window, combined with his accent.
Best of luck to ya
Posted by: PedroS, November 5th, 2022, 5:01am; Reply: 2
Hi Matthew,
Thank you for taking your valuable time and provide me solid feedback.
Your conclusions are right :)
Best of luck to ya
Pedro T. S.
Print page generated: May 15th, 2024, 2:11pm
Powered by
E-Blah Platinum 9.71B © 2001-2006