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Posted by: Don, April 2nd, 2023, 10:41am
A Few Nights by J.M. Elliot - Drama - After a failed truck stop robbery leaves his brother dead, a young man seeks refuge outside a small town. Reluctantly embarking on a treacherous journey with a brittle old man and a deeply troubled cop as he is relentlessly pursued by a maniac on the desert road. 104 pages

Production: Low budget, Character Driven, Minimal Cast. - pdf format

Writer interested in feedback on this work

Posted by: Iggy, May 25th, 2023, 3:50pm; Reply: 1
Wow what a story! I think Coen brothers would do a masterpiece of this. That Wilkes is a helluvaguy... phew...

SPOILERS!

I really sorry for the main characters. Not sure that Owen deserved that, so are the others. Dave is my favorite. I was hoping he'll be alright. Aubrey and Harris had a bad day either...

I like the slasher scenes. You did a good job at balancing hardcore and drama. Maybe, as for me, few scenes are prolonged a little bit, but overall it's a good professional script. It MUST become a movie!
Posted by: J.M., May 25th, 2023, 4:27pm; Reply: 2
Hey Iggy,

Thank you for taking the time to take a read. There definitely was some Coen brothers influence, focusing on the characters rather than getting lost in the chaos.

It was not a pleasant experience writing the ending, as I hoped for the characters to go on.  But unfortunately, it just wasn't in the cards.  

The film is something that is near and dear to me with the connections the characters make.

Thank you again, it means the world to me.


Posted by: Iggy, May 25th, 2023, 5:25pm; Reply: 3
Yeah it's good that you didn't force your characters to do what they shouldn't have done. In that world the happy ending is impossible  
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