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Posted by: Don, June 4th, 2023, 8:22pm
A Victorian Fantasy by John Stone - Short, Horror  - A Peregrine instigates a ghastly murder in this fantasy horror yarn. 5 pages - pdf format

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Posted by: D.A.Banaszak, June 6th, 2023, 6:51pm; Reply: 1
I think this is well written. It’s hard to get into a fantasy realm like this and present the action in way that can be followed. I could follow this. John Lennon would be impressed with the originality of the characters. There is a little bit of bite in this story that points out that not all fantasies are harmless.

I liked the style of the writing. It was colorful and descriptive almost to the point of reading like a novel, while still reading like a script.

I didn’t fully understand the motives of the Lobster, the Peregrine and the Guttersnipe. I just chalked it up to it being a dream sequence and many dreams are not understood. I know mine aren’t.

I get the impression that this may show up as part of another work, perhaps a feature. If so, I look forward to reading that.
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