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Posted by: Don, December 17th, 2023, 4:16pm
A Wyatt Christmas by Jason K. Allen - Short, Comedy - When Wyatt meets his girlfriend's parents and sees their inadequate Christmas tree, he decides to give them a few pointers on the meaning of Christmas. 11 pages - pdf format

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Posted by: D.A.Banaszak, December 23rd, 2023, 3:25pm; Reply: 1
This was an unusual story. Wyatt is an unusual character. I like the way you put him together. He was quite original.

I liked the ending. It had a rather "Now what?" feel to it... like Mom, Dad and Becca looking at each other thinking, "Now what do we do?"

I didn't see any profound typos in this. The formatting was solid and the story was easy to read.

This had the look and feel of a hysterical sketch comedy piece. Nice job.
Posted by: Stoneyscripts, December 24th, 2023, 2:13pm; Reply: 2
Wyatt is a nut job - period. He would have been toast in my house after he's first outburst.

What nice parents Becca has. Actually I found this interesting from a British perspective - rather silly, childlike humour. See, humour has a U.

Anyway well done, just not my cuppa, or spot of tea which I first thought you meant a pot of tea.

A nice American Xmas shorty to wet your appetite over the holidays.

Cheers for the share.
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